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Autumn Leaves

Autumn Leaves

A Poem by Eli

Autumn leaves swirled in delight

Around a foundation of sand

Once brilliant and young structure it was

Now fades through a cold gentle wind.

With day turned to night,

Pursuit forever turned away

A lost attempt to relieve a heart

Moon and stars, forever apart.


No longer will Spring flowers bloom with might

Come the end of Winter

But will lie vibrant and beautiful still

In cold portraits of lost time.

A strength of loss impels her soul

Bringing her about darkened meadows

Away from melodies of luscious gardens

Persuading her from illuminous sight


What is her mind, without its soul?

In the realm of a brightened land

A person need not a self-thought hand

But listen to their self-righted god.

And crows above call and seek

Louder and louder they make her weep

Red is the eyes from lack of sleep

Dawn, for her, will not be seen.


© 2011 Eli


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Eli
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Eli! This is an amazing way to get a jump back aboard haha. I really liked your poem and I definitely got a beautiful but sorrowful image painted into my mind while reading this. I especially likes the lines:
"The strength of loss impels her soul
Bringing her about darkened meadows
Away from melodies of luscious gardens
Tilting her apart from illuminous sight"

I believe you did an amazing job writing this! And that it goes great. I had to read it a couple times to fully understand the meaning of each stanza but it's great overall. Amazing job, you better write more poems or stories in the future! :D



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