She Asked Me Whats on My Mind

She Asked Me Whats on My Mind

A Poem by Aristede Craig Jr
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Everything and Nothing at the same time

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She kept asking me what i was thinking.
and i. when i spoke i gave her a painting.
pain you hear it "tingg"
my words always to sharp
the sting. pierce.
cut up when you don't give me enough.....
time.
see i rather you stay off the edge of my tongue
your patience might bleed dry...
this time...
watch it sometimes, im unconscious 
that your thinking of what's conscious
in my mind...
but as fast as you blink i would have thought a million times...
so be careful in the meantime when you ask: Love what's on your mind?...

#EdetSiraRamblingPoetry
#makelovevisible

© 2014 Aristede Craig Jr


Author's Note

Aristede Craig Jr
i was gone for some time,but try to get back going ... remeber i love comments ...opinions
and tis love is all

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Always a tense moment, of sorts, when that question is asked...yet if asked...all we can do is reel it off, smiles :) Hope you are well hon? x

Posted 5 Years Ago


but as fast as you blink i would have thought a million times...
so be careful in the meantime when you ask: Love what's on your mind?…

Those thoughts can be cutting at time, for sure. Whenever you can think nothing. Great one.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Aristede!!!! Good to see you back bro. Good free verse piece on the question chicks always, and I mean always ask. "What are you thinking about?"

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Good to see you back writing in vigor and answering questions. Bravo, sir...:).................

Posted 5 Years Ago


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Aristede Craig Jr
Aristede Craig Jr

new orleans, LA



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