Kiwi

Kiwi

A Poem by Effy
"

Lies and deception

"

I hope that tin can boat

don't float

as you push it out to sea.

I hope it rusts

and tears

and busts

and brings you back to me.

© 2011 Effy


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Effy
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the games of life little toy soldiers and tin can boats

if only we could get real and open our hearts to the girls standing at our side

in the end we do return to them

i hope you retain this childlike voice in your tool kit

it suits you

really good poem

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Aww...I thought it was adorable. 100% for you :D

Posted 10 Years Ago


Awh, so bittersweet! It made me smile yet also sad.

Posted 10 Years Ago


the games of life little toy soldiers and tin can boats

if only we could get real and open our hearts to the girls standing at our side

in the end we do return to them

i hope you retain this childlike voice in your tool kit

it suits you

really good poem

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

awwwwwwwwww the last line made me smile... regardless of how angry and hurt -you don't want them to leave.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Wow! Truly awesome. It makes me want to be him. ;-)

The lyrical tones sit just right, and the sweetness is nearly unbearable...

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Added on December 1, 2011
Last Updated on December 1, 2011
Tags: rubbish, waste, sea, boats, love, lies, anger

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Effy
Effy

United Kingdom



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