A Poem by Eiri


Pain and destruction is what she knew

She delved into the darkness

And left the light


As she fell further in

A light searched for her

As tears fell she turned away


He tried to reach her but couldn't

He called to her but darkness held

His light dimmed as she turned away


She went deeper into the darkness

And fell into oblivion

Falling and spinning into it


As she fell she saw his light

She then knew that he will come for her

And save her from oblivion


© 2008 Eiri

Author's Note

Well I wasn't planning to write in a particular pattern but it ended up looking like that.....Just let me know what you think

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I thought it was good. Imagery, at least in poetry, is very easy for people to create. This poem lets you use the word to create your own idea of oblvion (mine is in an empty, half destroyed building like in my poem A Note From Oblivion). No need for imagery unless that's your particular style. I say great job.

Posted 11 Years Ago

The poem was alright. It lacked outstanding imagery, but it was alright.

Posted 11 Years Ago

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Added on October 16, 2008
Last Updated on October 16, 2008



underyourbed, FL

Well I like to read book and manga, write, watch tv and anime, horror movies from Japan, I'm very easy to get along with and I can be slightly random at times. I live in the Sunshine state of Florida... more..

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