I'd Like My Killer To Be At The Funeral

self-explaining, melancholy, truthful

I'd like my killer to be at the funeral

to sit in the front during the eulogy.

I'd like for him to be a pall bearer

to carry me to the place where I should rest.

Allow him to wipe away my mother's tears,

to shake my father's trembling hand.

Do not send him to trial or to jail.

Have him spend ten hours a day

sitting upon my grave; send him

to the heart of the forests, to the tops

of the mountains, to timberland meadows,

to see what he had taken from me.

After seasons, his heart will be impaled.

He will know then that he is a thief

far more than he is a murderer.

Add his name to my tombstone.

He'll find he died also that day.

Reviews

[Sarah]

This is perhaps one of the most powerful pieces I've read ever. o= The entire concept and sad, quiet way that it was written is heart-breaking and almost a little unnerving. Wonderful vivid description and a whole new look at revenge for the person who took your life away. I adore this more than words can explain. Great job. =)

[Solis-Lopez]

wow that was awesome! i really liked the way you said all of that. the very idea that you would want the killer to find out slowly but surely just what he's taken is a beautiful and terrifying way of doing it! :D
awesome write!

[Toni Prehoda Kahler]

This is deep justice...."send him to the heart of the forest, to the top of the mountains, to timberland meadows to see what he had taken from me. After seasons, his heart will be impaled."

I read it also as a revelation of what matters most to you.....thank you for this unusual piece...

[Nicholas Hallows]

This is really good! Very different to a lot of what I have read on this site... and that HAS to be a good thing. The opening line is a great one. For me the whole thing is perfect from the start to 'to see what he had taken from me.' I like the rest too, but I love the first twelve lines. Nice! NH

[MrJodie]

This is the heart of compassion and the essence of true justice. This is epic writing.

"After seasons, his heart will be impaled."

Mine is bleeding, too, and I'm going to cherish the scar left behind. This is an injury I hope I never recover from. Thank you, so much, for this beautiful lesson. This one's a serious keeper.

[Dawn]

This is a unique piece of writing, and i thoroughly enjoyed it. I think a killer should do time like this, it maybe would make them think twice.
Keep writing, Dawn

I loved this! The idea that the killer would have to do this instead of jail time is very good. I thought that the ending was increadable! Great poem!

[Rambling Prose]

The long, slow death of a murderer indeed. Dying in the physical is a one time deal, but the conscious, never dies.

Nicely done...

[Amanda Naomi]

this is beautiful! i believe that the world needs forgiveness far more than punishment, for it is through forgiveness that the world may be healed....i give you tons of kudos!

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

First of all this is the one poem I;ve been needing to read...wow...My son was killed by a drunk driver one year ago and you have captured how I feel about that man. This is definately one of my favorites. Thank you Debileah