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A Poem by Elaenor Aisling

From such a gentle spirit

came such a harsh reubuke

and from such a verdant life

Oh, such an arid death! 


What hope once bloomed

within thy breast

until replaced by a blossom

of such deep despair.  


The fates did deal thee a bitter hand

such cruelty thou suffered, 

to be taken from day to night

and as quickly as thou were. 


Thy life, thy soul, such lovely things

how kind thy smile could be

thou were indeed a rarity

in such a dreary world.  

© 2012 Elaenor Aisling

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Lyric. Your lines feed one another. Nothing is off. They sound like a letter. They remind me of Sense and Sensibility, etc.

Good work. Perfectly expressed emotion.

Posted 11 Years Ago

reubuke? - line 2 The main reason I bring it up is it really takes away from the flow and the perception of your work.

The poem has an "olde" feel about it... the words - of course... it also has an evident underlying sadness and a sense of existence "lost" in a way it gets remembered - often.

Posted 11 Years Ago

Wow, this is a great piece.

Posted 11 Years Ago

Is this spiritual? Romantic? An ode to a friend? Ultimately, I think that's not what matters. What matters is the poignancy of the message. This is a wonderfully worded, skillfully written poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago

Mmm this is nice, you know I CAN feel her (Emily Dickenson) in it! Your name is very fitting somehow.

Posted 11 Years Ago

ec stop, contain yourself

Posted 11 Years Ago

Beautiful souls are indeed a rare event worthy of note

Posted 11 Years Ago

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Added on February 22, 2012
Last Updated on April 9, 2012
Tags: flower, gentle, hope, bloom, breast, life, death, soul, thing, world, poetry, rare, you, night, day, hand


Elaenor Aisling
Elaenor Aisling

Limerick, Ireland....I wish.

I am currently a student. I write mainly poetry, a few short stories here and there. I love to read and write. Favorite authors include, Victor Hugo, J.R.R. Tolkien, Tolstoy, Wilde, Alcott, C.S. Lewis.. more..


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