My Moonlit Theme

My  Moonlit Theme

 

She was sitting in a cold room

Wrapped in a blanket

Gazing into the empty screen

Having a déjà vu

Of the same mesmerizing dream

Only the full moon was there

To witness her surrender

To her moonlit theme

The frozen embraces of the night

Couldn’t steal a shiver from her

And yet, one loving word

Reaching her across the ocean

Was alone enough for an earthquake

Replacing her heart and stomach

And doing it quite wrong too

She was ablaze in the midst of cold

Because she was the moon

Facing blinding sunlight

And it was irreversibly

A total eclipse on her heart

 

Author's Note

Arigato Alex-kun for this inspiration ^_^

Reviews

[Bhavya Kaushik]

I guess this has to be your best till date that I've ever read.
This poem of yours totally WOWed me, lolz.. :D
The descriptions and the detailings in this piece were absolutely flawless.
This piece was so perfect from the lines which were so raw and vivid like-
"Replacing her heart and stomach
And doing it quite wrong too"
To the places where you raised the standard of this piece with brilliant imagery like-
"The frozen embraces of the night
Couldn't steal a shiver from her"
I absolutely loved it..Awesome!!!

[Mukeshkumar Mafatlal Ra..]

fantastic..piece.....the feminine sensibility awesome.....I have dedicated one of my poems to you...."Luna Thy Elanra...."pls. go through it . I m waiting for your response...I think you are busy with smthing else. or U must have visited my poem on your name......

[Nicole]

I don't know why, but I started tearing up.. O.o
I really liked this. xD
But.. was it supposed to be
"couldn't steal a shiver from her"
I don't know.. I'm just observing,
but its reallu good. I love it.