Darling- dear heart...

A poem of war and "peace".

Darling- dear heart,
Answer… please.
You’ve fallen, toppled-
And now I freeze.

I turn you over-
Lo…
The stare.

I close your eyes and brush your hair.

Darling-dear heart.
Please don’t leave,
For who will fight along with me?

We fight for war, we fight for peace.
Against the slavers, for slavery.
Over seas and by the wind,
“Together through the thick and thin.”

This and that-
Whatever was…
Darling.
Dear heart.
No war is won.

Perhaps one ends, for time wears down-
    Eventually we all grow tired.
But never can we reach true peace,
    When never does the gunfire cease.

 

Reviews

[Stephanie]

I think this is actually really good! I absolutely loved the first stanza:

"Darling- dear heart,
Answer� please.
You've fallen, toppled-
And now I freeze."

It grips you, makes you realize how real the loss of life is in war. How numb people can become when it's their loved ones who don't come home. I think you were about to say "love" where it says "Lo-" but I don't know. Either way, I thought this was really good and that you have a talent. Great job :)

[isis]

"Perhaps one ends, for time wears down-
Eventually we all grow tired.
But never can we reach true peace,
When never does the gunfire cease."
Kind of like an lone soldier talking to himself. To keep the fight in himself.

[Jessica R.]

This is amazing. The first stanza is my favourite-- it clearly portrays how you simply freeze up and become numb to all emotion. It's a great write; you have talen. Good job!