The Sadness of Warfare

The Sadness of Warfare

A Poem by Electrochique

A poem from the point of view of a soldier who has died in WW1. The poem itself is a little negative, but i hope the rhythm and energy gives it something a little bit special :)

When I awoke to my despair
I'd seen they'd left without a care
A sudden thought this is not fair
A sad result of this warfare

I had thought I'd hit my head
To my surprise I was quite dead
A bullet wound and how it bled
A lost cause the soldiers said

I walked around the battlefield
Looking down, my wounds had heeled
My ghostliness, it was revealed
Such a life could not much yeild

I wondered why they had left me 
Did no one want to mourn my body?
Did they think i would be happy?
To know they'd left my poor old body?

On the battlefields I decay
And throw my ghostly life away
Continuing in my dismay
On the battlefields i will stay

© 2010 Electrochique

Author's Note

i would really like advice on anything you think could help with my writing. any critiques are welcome :)
I'm not sure about the ordering of the last 2 verses. the repetition of body is intentional, not through lack of other rhyming words, ideas on whether i should swap the last to verses around please :)

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Added on January 28, 2010
Last Updated on January 28, 2010
Tags: war, warfare, world war one, world war 1, WW1, sad, dead



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