I'm not dumb, son.

Please leave feedback and point out anything I've missed such as grammar or spelling (it's 2am.) Thank you!

Can't hear, won't care.

Doesn't matter, don't care.

Torn and ripped up like newspaper,

pieced together, manipulated by a traitor.

An unpopular point of view,

made even more unpopular by you.

Tear the argument apart

and with ignorance you numb the heart

and soul of every fight

I ever fought in spite.

Call me stupid, call me immature,

I'm sure writing it on twitter will cure

your embarrassment and shame

of being nothing but the product of blame.

because I'm a woman? Maybe because I'm young?

But I'll tell you, son, I'm not dumb.

One day I'll speak truth and I will be respected,

Never quietened by a "shhh" or neglected.

One day I'll have more voice than anything you've ever heard.

and I'll have you dangling on a cliff, hanging onto my every word.

Author's Note

Again, sorry if spelling or grammar's a bit off. It's 2am and a bit angry again so wrote this out and I'm now posting, which I might regret in the morning(someone asked me about my opinion then COMPLETELY miss quoted me on twitter and made me look horrid and disgusting. So here's my anger at that.) Enjoy my rant.

Reviews

[Christopher Angel]

I don't think I've ever read a poem that referenced social media before but it's good. Personal. I bet this was something you were dealing with at 2am and you chose the cathartic approach of writing out your thoughts in poem form.

I feel for you in this, I really do.

[KAOlmsted]

Ha! Yeah. Sometimes you just have to write that s**t out. Great work, Ellie. Thanks so much for the friend request. Hope to read more of your work very soon.

-kimmer

[Dr. Wood ?]

brilliant final line that simply crowns a great poem.....

[Allen Smuckler]

Nothing wrong with expressing anger Elinor... unless, it is better to have slept on it first....writing it down is ok any time...hurting someone over something "silly"...if that's what it was...might be regretful...don't get me wrong Elinor..if someone deserves it...that's another story altogether...especially if he might have spread something for ALLL to read....
Anyway, I'm rambling.
I actually thought it was very good...honest, sincere and emotional...you can feel the hurt resonating in every sentence....more than the anger in fact....until you got "dumb"....which we all do sometime in our lives to our children..they always know more....My only question was why wait 'til one day....why not today? I assume however this is not about your "son"...
A couple of things I might alter for sake of rhythm perhaps...remove "up" in 3rd sentence and 4th line just keep "manipulated by a traitor"..I think "pieced together" is redundant. I relieve it also helps keep the cadence you began with. Your rhyming (especially the near or slant rhymes) and scheme were spot on. You did an excellent job in this regard and should feel proud of your finished product.
Well done Elinor
allen

[Elinor Williams]

Thank you very much! I do agree...but I do a lot of this in the heat of my anger or annoyance and I'm not always thinking clearly xD So I welcome comments like that because it really helps in the future!
The "Son" name is because it's a ageist term. It's almost like calling a 30 year old man "boy", it's not because he's my child xD it was mainly because he was putting me down (age wise and he was very sexist) so this was me standing up to him, because actually I am in fact almost a year older than me. And he was talking down to me like a 13 year old hormonal child? I refuse to be degraded in such a way. Thank you again! x

[Allen Smuckler]

You're welcome Elinor...looking forward to reading more
allen

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. Honest and direct thoughts.
"But I'll tell you, son, I'm not dumb.
One day I'll speak truth and I will be respected,"
If you don't demand respect. Won't receive it. I like the strong ending to the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[JordanIsaacSmith]

I'm terrible at reviewing poetry really, but from all the pieces I remember reading at A-level - this is certainly much more refreshing. Your anger and frustration really come through in this, and I'm sure the wordcap on twitter must limit you from expressing your anger on there! A really great poem and I hope you gave that fella what for! Even though you've told me all about this, I can't remember whether or not you berated him for being the way he was. But I think you did.

[Elinor Williams]

I didn't quite berate him, but I did tell him that I didn't appreciate being talked about or painted to be an army/military hating anti-christ :L I think I showed you the quote he retweeted and tagged me in of "You can play COD? Join the army" which was NOT what I was saying. Thank you very much! ^-^

[Emrick]

I love the message in this poem.
Nice message to women out there,you should stand out strong, and never let anyone treat you as dumb.Not the government not men.Stand for your rights women.

[dw817]

⊰ℛℛ⊱
Dangling off a cliff ? Nuu ! I get Vertigo ! :O
Can't really say I've been Shhh'd recently, have been slapped a few times for getting too loud. Chris does that cause I can be a pip.

But I see what you are saying here. "There is no greater wrath than a woman scorned."

Men's useful guide to 3 important words a woman can say !

FINE: This is the word women use to end an argument when they feel they are right and you need to shut up.

NOTHING: This means "something" and you should be on your toes. "Nothing" is usually used to describe the feeling a woman has of wanting to turn you inside out, upside down, and backwards.

GO AHEAD: This is a dare. One that will result in a woman getting upset over "Nothing" and will end with the word "Fine."

[JordanIsaacSmith]

Once again, you have missed the point.

And what's worse, is what you've just said is boarderline sexist. Now, I'm all for people interpreting things in their own way, but not if you come off as sexist or offensive.

You're exactly the type of person this poem was written about. I'm a very personal friend of the writer, so I know this. I know that when the writer gets on here, she is going to be pretty offended as she is a feminist.

[Ivana~]

Yes, I don't know her that well, but any woman would probably get upset at this. For that it is indeed sexist. Maybe when a woman says "Its fine" She really mean's that everything is okay. Also what you fail to realize is that men use those words in the "terms" you have listed them under as well.

Before you write a comment be sure you know what you are talking about. I mean no offense, I am simply stating my opinion to your past comment and this one.

[Elinor Williams]

Okay. 1) every comment you have ever made on my poems are about women being suppressed or annoying or a minority. On my last poem you thought it was about rape, this one about the ignorance of women? "There is no greater wrath than a woman scorned."-Nothing to do with this. It's almost like saying I'm being unreasonable for my response! I told someone my point of view, and he miss quoted me and made me appear like an unpatriotic, nation hating prick. I refuse to let someone post about me like that, just like I refuse to take this sort of rubbish comment on my poems. It's your interpretation-Yes. But Jordan put it perfectly, I'm fine with it, just don't try and offend me at the same time. It's this sort of ignorance that this was about.

"because I'm a woman? Maybe because I'm young?
But I'll tell you, son, I'm not dumb."
^Completely relevant to this post.

[Elinor Williams]

Also- Thank you Star*Elaina and Jord :')

[Ruhoun Q. Geins]

I'm sorry for eavesdropping, but I kind of found his/her comment/review funny. Don't get me wrong, I'm an active feminist, it's just that they sound true enough based on my experiences. Again, let me reiterate, I don't completely agree with what he or she said, but I find it funny. Not haha funny, it's oooh funny.

[dw817]

Sorry ... perhaps I have had women tease me in the past with different altercations ? Also those '3 words' is not something I made up. It's already out there. I thought it was silly what I wrote. I spoke it to Rose on the phone and she thought that was pretty funny. However, if you feel my reviews are this serious and need to be interpreted negatively I will refrain from adding any in the future at your request.

[ANTO]

I think its grand that you logicised and rationalised and wrote this though you were angry Elinor. Its quite clear who will be the winner in the long run but unfortunately some guys like to stir to score cheap points. Stirring eventually leads to trouble for the stirrer though and a bad reputation so take heart...
X

[Blissful Sin]

Sharp and to the point, love it.

-Bliss