Me, Myself, and I

 

 

My struggle lies deep within

The darkest places of my soul

I yearn to live a selfless life

Most times I don’t succeed

My struggle lies deep within

It’s me, myself, and I

 

If only I could realize

That the world revolves

Around the sun

Me, myself, and I would

Take a bow and leave

Most gracefully

 

This struggle will continue

Until the day I die

Of this I am for certain

Me, myself, and I

Reviews

[KayOss]

I love this... The simplicity of the language used serves to highlight your message, rather than detract. The message within is stated simply and eloquently. Rather than being lost in form or language or some other distracting device, your work stands stark and simple, as a truth harshly realized.

Me, myself, and I would
Take a bow and leave
Most gracefully

I love those lines. These are very special. They stand out to me, very powerful and strong. They are stated with a simple elegance, as if even though the speaker is conceding the point, he is not conceding his dignity. It is a beautiful work. Thanks for sharing this.

[Eagle Cruagh]

I`ll try again, Elise,
The first review vanished.
This is not really a review as much as a personal
observation.
I think you write expressively and with an economy
'of words that is very desirable.
You express a deep personal need in a beautiful
and talented manner.
Thank you !
----- Eagle Cruagh

[deadlife]

"If only I could realize"...the strongest line I feel.
very expressive write..beautiful.

burn yourself...end the darkness...
let there be fire.

bless you.

-rupam

[I Am THE LADY POET]

This is beautiful. I really like it. A great write

[K.Jones]

Beautifully written. Just don't loose sight of the fact that there is a thin line between self preservation and self absorbed. You must take care of yourself before you can take care of anyone else. I love the way you ended, with the struggle going on as long as there is life. :)

[Kara Hadley]

i love this. really. the message is portrayed effortlessly.
great work.

[Cynthia Feroce]

In just a few words, you said it all. The battle of the flesh and spirit. Well done.