Half-Beautiful

I have always been brave, with vulnerability

Loneliness has sharpened me

For a lifetime of temporal splendour

 

Earth's hurled dreams I devoured

I have always been brave, with intimacy

Down eager avenues of failure

 

Abandonment, the moon hid in my hair

The heavens they sang whispers

Down with the rain, in lowliness I waited

 

Humility in tremendous yonder

I grew younger in my special doom

I have always been brave, with trance

 

A radiance of spirituality thirst

A connotation of infinity, in my poverty

This crumbling silence all around me

 

Gave me the alienation like fingers

Beneath the snow, between my lips

Discovering a trembling smooth hope

In all the anguish of my feelings' harvest. 

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

"I have always been brave, with vulnerability"--great opening. Such a mournful and brooding write, but still starking beautiful in more places than can be mentioned. Words like "radiance", "spirituality", and "infinity" are set against images like "poverty", "crumbling" and "lowliness"...quite well played. I liked this one.

[Eloha]

Well tonight it was the best that I could do :P

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

The best that you could do seems to have done the trick...aren't you supposed to be asleep or something? :)

[Eloha]

Tonight I had an attack of thinking about my ex...but it's midnight and 15 here so I must try to sleep.

[Anne Martin]

I just discovered this in my reading list from 7 years ago. I must have put it there because I loved it and didn't have time to review it. I especially like the third stanza:

Abandonment, the moon hid in my hair
The heavens they sang whispers
Down with the rain, in lowliness I waited

Equating abandonment with the moon is unusual, but here it signals a transition from failure to hope. Well done.

[Corset]

Half beautiful, the duality, the side that wants to be golden, the side that knows it can't, I find myself a lot in this write, mostly bravado unless angered or hurt and then the bravery is real and swinging, lol, if only could we cut ourselves in half and save the better slice. Something called from this room tonight, and I remembered this name. So glad I did because this was incredible.