No Way Out

No Way Out

A Poem by Elrebmik™
"

no matter how hard you try...you just can't escape...

"

 

 
ANXIETY drags you down into the abyss,
Leaving you LOST and OBLIVIOUS
 
 
Transforming you into a mannequin of SILENCE,
Creating an alliance
 
 
You CRINGE in the labyrinth,
Searching for the right
Hoping,
BESEECHING,
But you never find the light
 
 
Amongst the DARKNESS
The thoughts intertwine,
Creating an INESCAPABLE STATE OF MIND…”

© 2009 Elrebmik™


Author's Note

Elrebmik™
Just a simple poem. :)

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Wow, this was a really dark write! I really loved your choice of words in this poem, and thought that the way you formatted it (with the different coloured words in capital letters) made this piece all the more effective and powerful. You did a great job in describing the scene, and I thought that your metaphor for the mind was really creative. A great write! :D
~PaperHearts

Posted 12 Years Ago


Its awesome, but i wouldn't call it SIMPLE. It has a lot of deep emotion that could be transformed into something even better.

Posted 12 Years Ago


really cool, really good, great work man =]

shane

Posted 12 Years Ago


I like how you have the words in a different color!
Great piece!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Very progressive in its dark message.. I love the exploration of gloom, so thanks for this..

Posted 12 Years Ago


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It's more than just a simple poem, it's wonderful. @@

Each bolded word added a lot of extra meaning to each line or phrase, and while still having extra meaning, you made the words flow very nicely. Good work. :D

Keep writing stuff like this. :D

Posted 12 Years Ago


Great work. [:

Fantastic imagery!

Posted 12 Years Ago


oh wow. this was deep. piercing....impressive work :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


What a wonderful poem! I found the vocabulary and imagery absolutely amazing! Creative and brilliant! :D

Posted 12 Years Ago


Loved the flow and rhythm of it, nicely done.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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