Sonnet #2

Here is the second installment in my sonnets. Another sad one. But I like it.

The smile on her face shines like sunlight

And the sparkles in her eyes tell him of

Stars. Her beauty makes the dark world so bright

It made him think of angels from above.

But there is a folly in this, cannot

You see? Behind the beauty and the welcome smile

That those singing stars have begun to rot

For those eyes in which they shone only go

cold. Hard with a sadness he will never feel

A sadness which her beauty never shows

A feeling so tangible and so real.

He watches her, her beauty full of grace

For she bids no tears to lie on her face. 

Author's Note

Enjoy

Reviews

[sHear]

It might be for another reason but using cannot there instead of can't just made that part sound awesome. Maybe it's a sonnet thing I don't know much about them. Sometimes using the same word over and over can be awkward but sometimes repetition can do good things. I'm thinking the word beauty in this piece is a good thing. At first I thought it might have been awkward but no I like it. Last two lines are ones I like alot, saying the beauty is full of grace, not the person or anything real concrete. Good piece though, I enjoy it.

[E.J. Michalec]

if i was to condense my entire review into two word it would be absolutely beautiful! the words flow so smoothly!