What if I told you

To my son

What if I said you were mortal

And there was an end to your ride?

And that you’d walk through that portal

And be stuck on the other side?

 

What if when departing this earth

You’ll leave behind your possessions?

Does it bring you sadness or mirth

To have no answers, just questions?

 

So live your life now and be bold

Do good unto others, my son

Today Leave your mark on the world

A sure way your name will live on 

 

 

Author's Note

I'm sure as hell don't know where this came from. I'm as surprised as you are, guys.
if you could improve on the poetic side of this.. thing, I'd be much obliged.

Reviews

[Norman 223]

You have asked the question that many of us have searched for. This is why there are so many religions. They all have different solutions - some banal, some kindly and some vicious. I asked the same questions in my poem "Wholly Unholy".
You don;t need to improve on your poetic presentation, Woody. It is brief ,concise and realistically worded..

Norman

[Woody]

Norman, it must be lack of confidence but I can never admit to myself thatt my poems are passable. how can I when I see wonderfully crafted verses such as the ones you bring here? ok I'm good with the rhyme but scan, rhyth, meter.... too much trouble. that's why most of my poems (such as the lymerics) are kind of "clownish".
ta very much for the review and the boost.
I agree to what you say about religions now let me go take a look at Wholly Unholy.

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Woody,

Intentional or not, you have penned a noteworthy true to life that always ends in death piece of philosophical poetry, the kind that people do not wish to read or hear, but damn sure do need to hear and confront themselves with ... The old saying, "here today, gone tomorrow," is much more truth than fiction and very applicable to real life lived until it is life no more and life is over and ends in death ...

Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham

[Katrina Mckeown]

It brought to mind that song by Bon Jovi I like( We Wern’t Born to Follow) ..I love the realistic flow of this poem.

[Ardra]

Today Leave your mark on the world
A sure way your name will live on

very true... :) guess we all need to open our eyes and a wake up call to all of us... to live..enjoy..smile more...

[Michael G. Smith]

Nice, simply put; summing up how we should be doing in this life.

[Woody]

hey MichaeL thanks a lot for the visit. in truth this is a rare moment of lucidity. I had a hard time keeping a straight face while I was writing this :)

[1VJ]

The madman writes poetry too! In all seriousness, a righteous read. Good thoughts for your son to live by. Be bold, best advice ever.

[Woody]

I keep telling reviewers not to judge me by these sporadic moments of "lucidity". that's not me really. but if you liked it, well I'm glad. thanks loads Paloma.

[1VJ]

I doubt they're sporadic funny guy, but I'm happy to see your evil twin comes out to play most days. :)

[Robert Haigh]

Good advice to your son. A touching write.

[Woody]

thank you so much Robert. a rare moment of lucidity, I assure you :)
glad you liked it.

[iand63]

There is a Milliganesque quality to your writing Woody. That sense of satirical truisms that I always feel when reading Spike is present in your work also.

[Woody]

I'm flattered iand63. thank you so much. I'm not all that much into poetry, really but I remember reading Milligan once. I've got a couple of his books. this makes me want to dig them up and take a look.
thanks again for stopping to read.

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chu..]

Wow! A very vell contructed alternate rhyme that made the content superb. The last stanza struck. Well written.

[Woody]

thanks a bunch Onyia. I do not consider myself a poet so I'm flattered you enjoyed this one.
thanks for the kind words.

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chukwuebuka Benson]

You're welcome.