My first attempt at HAIKU

My first attempt at HAIKU

A Poem by Mehak Mushtaq

Thy dear pretty world,
Poison juices, poison love
In holy flowers.

© 2013 Mehak Mushtaq


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I love this. Nice attempt. Just like a haiku should be, short and simple but really makes you think.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Spot on. Great first attempt. Keep it up.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mehak Mushtaq

11 Years Ago

Thank you.
KAOlmsted

11 Years Ago

Welcome.
The flowers protect themselves with things that kill. Beauty is dangerous.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mehak Mushtaq

11 Years Ago

It indeed is.
It does have the taste of humanity - hence senryu. You expressed yourself well.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mehak Mushtaq

11 Years Ago

I don't know much about Haiku and Senryu yet. Thank you for your review.
Chris

11 Years Ago

Haiku is a nature theme. Senryu is for anything that deals with humanity.
Mehak Mushtaq

11 Years Ago

Oh, now I got it. Thank you so much. :)
I find this meaningful...how some things/people can poison/corrupt somethings that are pure and holy...

well done :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I'm not sure this isn't a senyru, but it's quite good; syllable count is just right.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

awesome first foray into Haiku!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mehak Mushtaq

11 Years Ago

Thank you Quin :)
Deep words and somehow how they reflect your aura.....
I would give an 8 out of 10 considering it was your first attempt.....
Thank you for sharing!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mehak Mushtaq

11 Years Ago

Hmm, well, thanks.
Very, very good for a first attempt.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mehak Mushtaq

11 Years Ago

Thank you. :)

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Mehak Mushtaq
Mehak Mushtaq

Srinagar, Jammu and Kashmir, India



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