"Lover"

Still an experiment but a further progress. Deeply in the rough draft stage but take a gander and let me know.

Let me be the

your secret sheets,

as you are the 

myheartchest.

Let me :* your soul,

as you   your hair

                smile

Allow me to rest my lips

                          your neck

as i slip my yoH

                      urA

                         bloN            n           g

                             useD.  i

                                 t

Words can be flee

corhidingers,

when we need to remember 

them the most.

Yet my lips will never fail 

as long as they lay on yours.

So let me rest my head on your chest,

sleeping to the songs of your heart.  

Reviews

[Vinod Kumar U K]

Beautiful destination..............

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

In all honesty, I think this is terrible format for writing for just about anyone. I always praise a writer for experimenting and trying new things, though. Great write.

[emmajoy]

So sorry, I enjoyed the words but not the format, for me it's far too distracting - almost too clever .. especially the second stanza.

[DeletedUser]

I loved how you used different fonts and the word structure it help us readers grasp your point and to fully express yourself. Very creative and definately interesting.

[Tasha]

Thought out very well
And full of true feelings
I liked the structure.
♥ Ta'Shandra

[Black]

a unusual poem,
though well thought
and full with feelings