a mask

a mask

A Poem by Ethereal Eclipse
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wrote this one a couple days ago, what do ya think?:)

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tears of joy

tears of pain

a lies ploy

a scream again

hide behind a face

hide behind a lie

stand strong, full of grace

always laugh never cry

smiles grow

upon that face

only you will know

its only good as lace

never tell

never show

none know your hell

appear above, fall below

no one will ever catch

no one cares to see

heart never to reattach

don't show, this you is me

little girls

hide all day

her pain never unfurls

she never truly plays

one she trusted

he lost it still

now her heart stays encrusted

so she no one can kill

smile wave

nod laugh

no trust gave

not even half

© 2013 Ethereal Eclipse


Author's Note

Ethereal Eclipse
yeah, i know this is no good, but please tell me how i can improve it and what you think when you read it

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I can fully relate to this piece, excellent work.

Posted 8 Years Ago


this sounds like a lot of trauma and personal pain. there is a sad longing and some deep regret here, i think. very nicely worded and penned to make an easy read. well done!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Why is the mask there?

Posted 8 Years Ago


Makes one wonder of the true beauty behind the mask. Good piece.

Posted 8 Years Ago


very nicely penned, big deal of optimism and joy spread here..

Posted 8 Years Ago


Ethereal Eclipse

8 Years Ago

thank you for the review, though i do not see how this is a optimistic piece, will you care to enli.. read more
This was a sweet beautiful piece and it's a shame u think its up to no good...i think maybe you could work on the rhythm a bit....for example the first few paragraphs had a good rhythm to it but maybe it lost the beat at last a bit..but on the whole, it was a good job:-):-):-D.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Ethereal Eclipse

8 Years Ago

thank you so much:) i will try and apply that for future poems:)

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Tags: mask, tears, face, fake, full, of, grace, false, smiles, good, as, lace, cry, weep, lies, lie, tear, show, never, fall, below, hell, fate

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Ethereal Eclipse
Ethereal Eclipse

middle of nowhere, KS



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Hello, not really good at these about me things, but i'll do my best...here's a couple things i'm pretty sure won't attract crazy stalkers(jk) 1. i'm a girl 2. i'm between the ages of 15 and 18 3... more..


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