Pretend

Pretend

A Poem by Evelynn

Tell me that you love me

And tell me that we’re fine

Trust me, I know that you’ll be lying

But tell me that you’re mine

Can you at least pretend

For just one more day

That you care about me

So that the memories won’t fade

Fill my head with pretty lies

So my eyes don’t fill with tears

Even though when you do leave

I’ll be crying for what seems like years

So please, do this for me

Even though I know you don’t care

So when you do leave

I’ll have something to help me bear

© 2018 Evelynn


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It is better to be hurt knowing the truth than to feel comfort in lies. One should not live pretending something that they are not. But in your case, I totally understand your situation. You want to feel that concern from the person so that you remember something good that consoles you when he leaves. Very heart touching poem. Don't lose hope.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Evelynn

2 Years Ago

Thank you!
Najam Us Saher

2 Years Ago

You're welcome.



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I guess what makes us poets unique is to express things that people feel but cannot always expressed for themselves. Therefore I respect your creativity and freedom of expression within the concept depicted.

But, as a reader, almost like a spectator, I would kindly say that love must be true, genuine, honest, sincere, patient, forgiving, reciprocal...
but never based on pretence.

Somebody loves you or they don't. From the moment somebody has to pretend to care, then you know such relationship is built on sand, for the waves of truth and love came and such relationship crumbled, hurting somebody on the path.
Conversely, a relationship that'll stay stable, fun, adventurous, reciprocal... will be like that house built on rocks reinforced with steel and iron; for the waves of lies, jealousy, deceit, cheating came and had no effect, none whatsoever-- for such relationship has a strong foundation.

WELL DONE


Posted 1 Year Ago


Oh dear I have been here, so sweetly sad said! But as i have learned over the years some times that leftover bit of sandwich isn't all that great tasting anyway! :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


good write. betrayal hurts like few other things, remembering the good things in life and thankfulness this relationship time was cut short may be a blessing.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Evelynn

2 Years Ago

thank you!
This is a well-crafted message of futility using strong rhyme & rhythm. The hopelessness is palpable & the inevitability weighs a ton. Even tho your language is simple & straightforward, you pack an intense punch. I remember the last time (in my 30’s & I’m 61 now) I thought “one more night” would be a good thing, but it never is! After that experience, I learned to close the door firmly and step away from that urge (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 2 Years Ago


Evelynn

2 Years Ago

Thank you!
Your emotional expression that is both complex and simple at the same time continues to impress. Such beautiful writing.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Evelynn

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much!
Your really good at expressing your emotions like I am. I feel the same way as you do in this poem, this was just amazing.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Evelynn

2 Years Ago

Thanks! :)
I think perhaps in many situations the other half is still hesitant to take the leap for whatever unknown reasons. Thoughts like what you’ve expressed here can make a difference sometimes. Getting the issues out in the open is a good thing.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Evelynn

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much! :)
This rhythm is crazy good which makes it all the more memorable. Great writing!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Evelynn

2 Years Ago

Thank you!!
I used to wish that too, but oh well, it's much better to just accept the truth and let go for your own sake. Beautifully written :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Evelynn

2 Years Ago

Thank you!
ooh great job with the rhyming!! usually when people try to rhyme (me included!) it sounds forced... but you did a really good job fitting the end words in naturally :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Evelynn

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much!

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