Give Me Faith Once More

Year poem was written: 2013

      When darkness consumes the earth,

            and evil reigns.

      When vile sins flourish and prosper,

            I trust that you will.....

 

      When fires burn on for eternity,

           and ruins are formed.

       When all hope seems to be lost,

           I trust that you will......

 

       When humanity suffers in sorrow,

           and graves are always dug.

        When faith seems to be but a myth,

           I trust that you will.....

 

        Give me faith once more.

Reviews

[Regina K. Pride]

I like this poem. It is very inspirational. Here are some things that I think you should consider:

When darkness consumes the earth,
and evil reigns.
When vile sins flourish and prosper,
I trust that you will.....

When fires burn on for eternity, -> cut "on"
and ruins are formed. -> change to "and ruins form"
When all hope seems to be lost, -> insert "all" before "be"
I trust that you will......

When humanity suffers in sorrow,
and graves are always dug. -> change to "deeper graves are dug"
When faith seems to be but a myth, -> change "seems to be" to "is"
I trust that you will.....

Give me faith once more.

Good job! :)

[Ezekiel Silver]

Thank you for the suggestions!

[Regina K. Pride]

Sure. Any time.