Alone

Alone

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
"

do take the time to watch the dance video ..it is so cool...says i! ;)

"
 Peering
The pair pirouettes on
                                  the pier.
The lightning wasn't quite right
             
they
couldn't quite focus on point.
I am not sure what happened to them.
They just kept spinning 
on their own
in the mist.
                      Alone
10/15/2017
E

© 2017 Einstein Noodle


Author's Note

Einstein Noodle

My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Reviews

That was lovely and softly magical to read, when I read the title I wasn't expecting this, but what a sweet surprise I had :) when lovers join into one, they will drift into their world, no matter where they are... I don't know but Your pair made me think of "lightning and thunder" pair :) thank You*

Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

your impressions are so cool..i could not ask for more..thank you so much for visiting and reviewing.. read more
lightsong

3 Years Ago

Of course it's! You are warmly welcome :)
A fun read... we see them spin.. and wonder where and how they are.. off in a mist..hidden, showing off their talent beyond our view...

Interesting..

Jazzy

Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

yes! one can fill in as seems right ;) or not :)) thank you again for visiting and letting me know y.. read more
J. J.  Nightingale

3 Years Ago

You are welcome !!!.................J.J...:)....
really nice...I love the way you write and how you lay out your versed points highlighted by individual words.....and broken their by their strength although the word alone is maybe not such a powerful word....

I was criticised recently because my poems are not fit into a structure of standards poem..
but to me poetry or even just words are my art inner that I produce wit no rules and It is for no one else.....i can except comments ect .....but it's my achievement to put my emotion into words......it's not my concern if you don't like the confusion of my life you see through those words.....I'm not here to conform.

this poem is great so fast and deep and powerful....I love it my friend.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

ohhh thank you so much for your encouragement ..free verse is what i am most comfortable with tho i .. read more
Wow, two ships lost in the night comes to mind here. Too bad they were unable to find each other. Short, sweet and to the point. Excellent word economy in this one, gargantuan meaning.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

spot on interpretation Karen .. thanks so much for taking time to review .. peace and joy
E.
Nice poem! Musical words and I love the ending, dramatic. Tyfs!!!

Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

thanks for taking time Cyprian ... did you happen to catch the video? it came after the poem but eve.. read more
Cyprian Van Dyke

3 Years Ago

I saw the video, they're really nice dancers. :)
The fun combination of "p" words at the beginning was simple and complex at the same time, great job!

Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

i bothered over the "p" words and in the end decided to keep them ..i appreciate you have pointed th.. read more
I adore your trippy word play. If you haven't already noticed I'm a big fan of playing with my words. I mean why not? Some of the best writing are when you let go of structure. That's when the true original form of your thoughts take action. I see so many writers fall into structure. They are rigid and prudish...scared to try anything new. And I want to ask them, why even write? It's like only drawing in back and white. Why wouldn't the artist be curious about other mediums. Words like art...can also be colorful. Well penned.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

yes...hear hear for free verse ... without any knowledge nor education it is the form i used at the .. read more
Love your play on words & the "p" sound at the beginning . . . then I really started to feel the spin & the aloneness of a solitary spin. I enjoyed your video & also (at this time of year, as the winter Olympics approach), I am an avid watcher of figure skating, which also imparts a similar spin sensation! I like the way your poetry spins my head around! *smile* Fondly Margie

Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

i was not sure about the "p" sounds ..but left them ;} .. yes...its the alone i was after .. thank .. read more
Quite beautiful, both the poem and the video. Alone can be so many different things from serenity and peace to sadness and desperation. So much depends upon our perception or attitude. Bless.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

how true how true sir .. i love when i am drawn back to thisone by reviews as i watch the dancing al.. read more
And even alone can be tragically beautifully at times...the poem as moving as the video, breathtaking piece E :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

wow! thank you so much for your kind, encouraging review, Poppy ... so happy you enjoyed both :)

Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

2210 Views
39 Reviews
Rating
Added on October 15, 2017
Last Updated on October 18, 2017

Author

Einstein Noodle
Einstein Noodle

Pork Rind, AK



About
"What arbitrary assignments! .. What arbitrary differentiations! What one-sided preferences, first for this, then for that property of a thing! ... with words it is never a question of truth, never a .. more..

Writing

Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..