Einstein's Ring

i hope you enjoy this go at an English sonnet and a bit of romancing the Science ... i added a haiku for the same title for fun .. let me know what you think :)

Einstein's Ring

My darkness falls over your haloed brow;

beguiling my heart, seducing my dream.

These eyes in search, the sourcing of the Tao,

a beauty eclipsed beyond what it seems.

Fair light is bending 'round curves, thus renew

dark matter enraptured heart in the skies

my gravity closing  a rainbow hue

to gather wrapped fingers of stars and sighs

Your presence was hiding behind cold shield;

while lightning explodes in brilliant arrays

Light sounding 'round heavenly faces yield

sun rings while Helios tightly at bay.

Gaze not in wonder God's gifts that abound;

songs of the Universe sing and resound. 

Haiku (of the same title)

galaxies hiding

eclipsing eyes perceiving

light bends delighting

Author's Note

from Wikipedia
"n observational astronomy an Einstein ring, also known as an Einstein-Chwolson ring or Chwolson ring, is the deformation of the light from a source (such as a galaxy or star) into a ring through gravitational lensing of the source's light by an object with an extremely large mass (such as another galaxy or a black hole)."[1][2]

dark matter: (same sourse)"Dark matter is a type of matter comprising approximately 27% of the mass and energy in the observable universe that is not accounted for by dark energy,"

dark energy: "a theoretical repulsive force that counteracts gravity and causes the universe to expand at an accelerating rate.
"Einstein's theories allow for the possible existence of dark energy" "

Reviews

[lightsong]

For me, and aside of the Author's note, this was a meditation's experience, the connection with the higher divine power, the images You saw through it, the presence of Your lover whom was firmly there almost in each image, it was like floating through the universe, an experience not many can fully go through. an amazing sonnet Mr.E something new from You for me to read, and it was a pleasure and real joy, the Haiku is quite amazing and strong too, it's like a "waking up" message to open the mind, to see beyond what eyes can see, and in both poems I felt a sentimental yearning waving gently like the calm sea behind Your lines.

Thank You for sharing Your superb experience with all of us.

[Einstein Noodle]

what can i say Light ... such a sensitive reflective read and review on your part ... i could not feel more gratified as a writer ... when you see and feel all the things in a poem we are truly connected says i! thanks so much Light! glad you liked it ... yes, sonnets are not my cup of tea and i have to work extra hard at them .. but i think i grow a bit each time i do ... as well as some of the other strict classical forms ... they stretch my word appreciation :}
E.

[lightsong]

You are always so very welcome, and I say that You surely have big and wide wings to adventure in the realm of poetry 😊 🦅

[Einstein Noodle]

:))))))))))))))))))))))) thanks Light!

[Sami Khalil]

I always loved and admired astronomy as you share with us your gift and knowledge of the Heavens from poetic and scientific views and observations. I also admire Einstein and his marvelous contributions to science and humanity. Thank you for sharing these two wonderful forms...:)....................

[Einstein Noodle]

and thank you for reading and commenting sir! ...i think science, math and artists all have something in common ..its just the heart is left out of science and math :) pretty much by definition ..Einstein was an adventurous soul no doubt .. he reminds me of Star Trek and their motto ... he was also at times not so scrupulous ... a human genius to be sure ;)

[Sami Khalil]

So true. You are welcome, sir....:))))

[andrew mitchell]

brilliant work from a master, the sonnet, the haiku just pure poetry on science,brilliant lol

[Einstein Noodle]

i am really glad you read this one sir! what a pain the sonnet is .. after many many changes i think it fits the form ... whew! Kl's sonnet got me hooked on doing one and her and Richard were encouraging and helpful in the continued tweeking ... worth the effor tho ..i feel a little more focused and grounded as a result ... thanks again for taking time .. so glad you enjoyed
E.

[andrew mitchell]

must look into the sonnet

[Bacchus]

i'm geeking out here...
love science first
love learning too
and here its all wrapped up as amazing
and interesting as it ought to be.
so cool.

[Einstein Noodle]

your rocking my morning Bacchus!!! really appreciate your review ... there is great majesty and admissions in our sciences and math both ...a marvelous world whether going wide expanses or microscopic ...universe ;)) Einstein was very much a human being ... with weaknesses, faults and mistakes ..yet his avante garde thinking opened up so much to the world around him .. really feel happy for your stop to read and comment Bacchus ... thanks again!
E.

[Earl Schumacker]

Hi E. Very solid Sonnet. They are very hard to construct. Yours reads naturally, unforced. That is a good thing. The Haiku is also solid and very well structured...naturally. Good job. Fun Read. Earl

[Einstein Noodle]

Earl ..i could not hear sweeter words than your comments ...what a pain the sonnet is ..every time i read it seems a fault reveals itself to me ... so glad you enjoyed the read and again very thankful for the encouraging words
E.

[AliciaB]

I have to admit, the theory behind the Einstein ring and dark matter/energy are beyond me, and the poem itself is difficult to grasp without a solid understanding of the background. But the language is beautiful. My favorite line is "and gather wrapped fingers of stars in the skies." The imagery throughout this piece, while difficult to fully comprehend, conveys a theme of magnificence and etherealness. Perhaps the incomprehensibility is part of what makes this so effective. Would it be silly to call this "stellar"? :) Whatever the case, it's beautiful. Great work!

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Alicia! i really appreciate the feedback ..(so important i think) "stellar" is pretty awesome ! thank you so much! for struggling with the theories and finding something ethereal .. i could not ask for better ..love and peace and thank you again Alicia!
E.

[Ana Papaya]

Fabulous! And educational too! :)

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you ma'am! so glad you enjoyed reading .. some ideas from the real Einstein ;) he remains a very intriguing character ..very human in strengths and failings .. :)
E.

[Ana Papaya]

Well, it is human to fail. :)
Success often is born from the many preceding failed attempts.
Test and learn.... :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Ok, darling. You really should have saved the progressions of this piece. It is beautiful, yet so different from the original. I have the one in my PMs to you - maybe you should post the changes - a sort of tutorial as it were.

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my goodness! are you signing off??? how happy i am if you are! yes the finished product is very different ..i must have changed everything thrice :} ..but i think the content remains .... i do have some of my original thoughts saved and i think the first forming of this .. i will add it ... i can't thank you and Richard enough for the encouragement and guidance you have offered ..it is quite rewarding and i think i will continue to use classical forms for a while .. once through the labor ..the birth is joyous and pain forgotten ..well...almost ;)
E.

[Lyn Anderson]

I didn't dissect it, that's up to you. I can see the changes in the iambics, I know you said originally you were short on syllable counts. Not sure about the ence/ance, I believe those may be trochaic.

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ................

[Alfred Kukitz]

I love science lessons in poetic form. Hopefully E you will bring us more enlightenment of our universe to eyes that behold the same wonder of our world.

Regards,
Al

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Big Al! science holds so many miracles but is so wrapped up in the math it needs to be released as fireworks and butterflies eh!? ;) thanks for reading my friend ... and for your encouragement :)
E.

[Pryde Foltz]

Clap clap clap ... you are brilliant, E. Romance meets physics meet the spiritual. A tip of the hat:):):) This deserves nothing less than a 100 times infinity. Unfortunately the system will let me give you 100:)

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my goodness Pryde! i could not be happier with such a review .. as KL and Richard (as well as i) have agreed ..it needs a ways to go to be full fledged ... and i want to make it better to gain the full benefits of being more disciplined ;) i am so encouraged by your review .. thank you so much!
E.

[Pryde Foltz]

I speak to the quality of content:):):)

[Einstein Noodle]

yes ... thats why your review makes me so happy ..those are the goals i wanted (aside from putting it in sonnet form) i feel very gratified .. so thank you again for reading and responding .. :)))))

[Richard🖌]

An amazing two pieces of poetry, E … truly!
Your scientific tidbits placed an especially interesting period to this very enjoyable interlude, too … I learned something new, which is always an unexpected benefit.
Word-choice, ease of flow, rhymes (except in V3), imagery, entertainment factor, etc; all very impressive to the senses.
As a full-fledged Sonnet, it has a ways to go, but I see that KL is addressing that aspect with you, and i know she will treat you right … she knows her stuff! : )
The Haiku? Fantastic in every way this little poem should be done … I love it!

Thank you, My Fine Friend, for sharing your amazing poetry and wonderful effort in this very challenging form … I look forward to watching your progress! ⁓ Richard

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you so much Richard ..for taking time ..you and KL were just the challenge i needed to make this attempt ... today i am committed to making such change=s as i can on the road to making this "full-fledged" ... i don't know how V3 got past me??? thank you for pointing it out ..at least that mistake will be easy to fix ...(maybe :} ) i am so grateful (again) for your input and sharing your expertise with me!
E.