The Deep

The Deep

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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this is a lipogram i wrote for a class (same class the cinquaine was written for) the lipogram, for those who are unfamiliar with, is a poem using one vowel only. i chose "E"

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"The Deep"
The endless Ether
left deep clefts                                        
heed me
keep knees free
                                     enter the descent
                                                                     Hell's decree bends the rent
See me!?
Steep we creep
Spent.
Endless Ether we flee
11/28/2018
E.

© 2019 Einstein Noodle


Author's Note

Einstein Noodle
I struggled to have a theme ... would really like to know if you have a sense of one .. :}

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It’s a different kind of creative joy when we are able to produce worthwhile expression within the limitation of format and structure. For me that’s the supreme kind of satisfaction. I read the endless twists, turns and bends as we navigate, crawl, hurtle through the all pervading ether to our ordained ends. Appreciated very much, E 💕

Posted 2 Years Ago


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DIVYA

2 Years Ago

Oh bedtime then! :)
GoodMorning hugs! And do grab a bit of sleep :))))
Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

headed that way now ;)
DIVYA

2 Years Ago

.......😉☺️😊.......



Reviews

Aloha E, so incredibly clever as is the form and narrative. There is a street type quality - dark & punchy word choices, even within this style which makes it even more impressive. I really like this and the song seems so very fitting - what a great choice. Mahalo, Izzy.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

Aloha dear Hippy!!! :) thank you for mentioning the song too! I appreciate that! it is a dificult fo.. read more
Wow you muse in sublime rhyme scheme here. Impressive format as well. It reads in great rhythm and intent. Kudos.

Soo nice to read from your inking again, pleez do comment/add your thoughts/ review my newest poem too. I like saying hi to poets and poetry.


Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

nice to meet you S .... i will definitely stop by your pages too!
E.
F*****g awesome. I think youre really close to a solid narrative. It looks like fun. Gonna try it tonight or tomorrow!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

hey Cyrano!! what a treat to have your visit ... and nice to meet you .... i feel pretty gratified b.. read more
CyranoDBergeron

2 Years Ago

Lol. Yeah I tried it last night with O. It was hard. You lose all your prepositions. So a solid narr.. read more
Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

i agree ... worth the effort :)
ether, the rarer regions of space is also what the poets of the 18th century wrote about exponentially. In fact it took another 200 years before man could write a love poem about his or her emotions. And readers could grasp those references and believe them....great poem....dana

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

wow! that's a rich history isn't it ... especially how long it took to be "proper" to write about em.. read more
Writing a lipogram is truly a practice in discipline and good taste.
At the same time such a struggle, not to use words that you find irresistible.
With your poems ( for your on line class) you are teaching me wonderful new lessons.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

thanks for reviewing Mrudula! i appreciate your time taken ... yes! the classes are inspiring and th.. read more
Mrudula Rani

2 Years Ago

Thank you E. At the moment i have very little free time. But the course sounds very interesting and.. read more
Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

thanks! you are very kind. :)
Now this is clever and different, a anew form to me i must admit and wonderfully done :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

thanks Stella ... I just finished the class this one was used in ... its a free basic class on poetr.. read more
E for vowels and for entertainment. I knew you possess many talents and disciplines, i.e. E for example.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

ahahahahahha :))))))))))))))))))) your review puts a big smile on me face sir! thank you!!!
E.. read more
Sami Khalil

2 Years Ago

Hahaha. You are welcome...
Very deep and poignant write, here. To be able to do that and stay within the confines of the structure is simply amazing to me. The thought process behind it is intriguing knowing that there was a certain amount of time assigned to come up with just the right words. A great way to start my Monday with!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

your comments bless me Dara...thank you so much for reviewing this one ... it was challenging and re.. read more
Dara

2 Years Ago

Thank you, I think I might have a go at it. Will let you know if I do :-) Yours will inspire me to d.. read more
pretty clever my friend,,liked it

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

thanks for reading wordman! and letting me know your thoughts ... so glad you like it ... it wasn't .. read more
 wordman

2 Years Ago

lol,it ain't easy for any of us
Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

;) ...................
E is elevating, exciting and engrossing. This is hard to pull off. I will stick with all the vowels (weapons) in this war to Express mysElf. Thanks, Einstein.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

ahahaha as i will as well Max!! we do need all we can get for sure! thank you so much for taking tim.. read more

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