Affairs of the Heart

Affairs of the Heart

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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loosely generalized observations ;)

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Affairs of the Heart

For every man
who wins her heart
A man stands in shadows
torn apart

For every woman 
who finds her man
three are broken
unable to stand

Sunrise could not find him in  heart's shadow
No sharper edges wrought to cleave those bindings;
locking the pain with loss and despair
another had won her love. 

disregard replete; he moves
one to another, another; and another 
now in bliss, remiss of those memories,
he weds while broken stems alter Sunrise
no longer kissing their lips
hands only brushed the pearl of their veils now
fingered shards, shred them to shrouds 
three to cover each.

03/10/2019
E.


*the first two verses were one of those "flash inspirations" one has the tendency to think they are genius, only to throw them out when read later ..i know you all know what i mean ... but i didn't throw them out because it "felt" right .. so i added the second two verses ... trying to say the same thing in a bit different way ... would love to know your thoughts on them

© 2019 Einstein Noodle


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Dear Mr E. I found your poem moving. It also brought a memory back of an aunt by marriage I was very fond of. She really cared for me at a time my parents were 400miles away. I was young. She said to me to hang on to my man and look after him because there were other women round every corner waiting to prise him away. She wasn't wrong there, that's exactly what happened.

That loss is incredibly difficult to deal with, there was much pain and I sensed that in your lines you yourself understand that loss. Loving someone who doesn't feel the same way about you sucks. Sometimes you may meet someone else, but that broken trust shatters the heart and it takes one hell of a lot of glue to stick it back together.

Do not bin this piece. You have much to say here. This reader fekt your words on an emotional level.

Chris





Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

oh no Chris ... as i started to read your review i thought it would be a more happy story with your .. read more
Chris Shaw

5 Years Ago

Hugs very gratefully received. I am so sorry for your loss. Your words have a universal appeal. Loss.. read more
Einstein Noodle

6 Months Ago

thank you Chris ... i appreciate all your support .. wasn't sure about the first two verses as they .. read more



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my generation were expected to marry young and have a family, that was the norm then, but now it makes sense that young love is passionate and burns out, better to wait and see than give everything to one person then find that someone else you had known was meant for you all along. Rejection, it hurts yes, but things happen for a reason sometimes ....

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

i am happy this sparked your wisdom Stella ... so true .. in fact i thought of a very young lady who.. read more
Stella Armour

5 Years Ago

it comes with age lol .... and i am an old thing now :))
Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

ahahaha me too...and loving every minute!!!
Well, Gene,
In as much that you asked for shared thoughts on this piece, and speaking technically -- to my thinking, in poetry (in particular) it's seldom ever a good idea to be too verbose (as in the final two verses), when simplicity is more effective, most easily understood, and enjoyed by one's readership.
Of course, it's never a reason for happiness to realize the one loved has chosen another, expressed so succinctly in the first two well-struck poetic verses.
Just my take on this piece -- and, I'm expecting a healthy discourse … smile*

Thanks, My Friend, for the privilege of honest critique, and for asking it of us! ⁓ Richard 🍃

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

so grateful for your critique always Richard ... i responded to you e-mail so will not repeat in thi.. read more
Richard🖌

5 Years Ago

I was expecting flying shards … LOL!
That's one beautiful poem E.

Mmmm I read somewhere
Aren't we all ex of someone..
Heheh.... and yet to be lover of Some one else.. :p

Ah life never plays fair... guess if we knew all the end results then life wouldn't be intresting...
(Hugs)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

spoken as a true life's warrior, Ardra! i am so happy to see you around me pages ... hope all is wel.. read more
The first two are genius in the same sense that genuine is real and inspired is visceral. The rest needs a tablespoon of Thousand Island or Ranch Dressing.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

thanks for taking time Delmar! even as a child i only use Italian ;)))))))))))))))))
E.
this is an interesting set-up for you. Great to see you have taken a new road. I very much like this.

I like the flash of inspiration snippet at the end and I can fully understand where you are coming from - it's moment like these where I feel we are truly 'tapping in' to the connectedness of all, of everything - it's moments like these I wish we could drag out like the last of the sun on a perfect spring day.

and yeah - love - ha - it's complicated !!!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

i know...it is a new road every now-when ;))) those "brilliant " snippets i throw out are as embarra.. read more
“Fingered shards, shred them to shrouds”- So dark, so true E. No bin should ever hide this poem. The number three so prominent, mysterious- the bell tolls three times for the unrequited love lost perhaps. The first two rhymed and rhythmic verses dramatically, symbolically set the scene for the ominous vignette that follows, the ghost-brides discarded. Loss leading to the sepulcher. “Nevermore.” Poe-esque, Blake-esque, E.-brilliant! Love this immensely.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

oh my....Annette... your review touches me .. i am so humbled ... thank you so much ... funny how th.. read more
Annette Pisano-Higley

5 Years Ago

You are most welcome E.!
You know what popped into my head.
Your first stanza could be an opening for short romantic story.
Then each stanza that follows could do the same.
It could be about one couple and the wake their love leaves behind or a 'Love American Style' story with each stanza highlighting a new couple.
This poem overflows with life and cries to be explored.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

thanks Cherrie! for taking time and your inspiring input!! i can see your points clearly ... lets al.. read more
You always, always touch one's heart, Mr. Gene! Your understanding of how life hits us with sadness (or happiness) seems so deep, so utterly sincere. Love can make people fly into secret, beautiful places.. but, in so many circumstances can drop us into hell itself. Seems that whoever and wherever, we can find the right person and live forever content -- or never quite recover from the stain of our tears over another.

There again, loving needs be a two-way emotion... it's the finding of it that either tills or hammers the heart. You've said so much even with two versions.. you have THE way of saying.. .. all sorts.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

dear emma ... you made my day ... you share your life here and see into others poetry so well .. it .. read more
emmajoy

5 Years Ago

Waving across the b'weathered miles, sharing a touch or few of joy. Yes?
How biting yet beautiful this poem in showcasing the idea of being left alone and lonely, seeing someone you loved so dearly love someone else! We all have been through this at some point or the other. Loved the different perspectives. Thanks for sharing, E:):):):);)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

wow...deear fatty breezy!!!! i am so tickled to have your visit ... you have been absent for a while.. read more
You can't help who you fall in love with. And love hurts sometimes. Particularly when you just can't move on or forget that special one. And how it affects you still even to this very day. Deeply emotional, heartfelt poem Einstein. They say in general men never show their feelings. But when it comes to love. They really feel with everything deep inside them. And never forget and try to hold onto the past sometimes. As that is their way of coping with their great loss.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

spot on Dawn ... men do feel deeply when it comes to falling ... when it happened to me i not only t.. read more

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