i Want

i Want

A Poem by Einstein Noodle

“There is an ocean in the middle of the forest.” “Say what, now?” “An ocean! In the Forest, right in front of you! See? There’s a whale! A whale!” “Oh wow,”

i Want
i want your eyes to speak as
hands that grace lilting southern magnolias ...a
tensile tenuto .... a
leaving of finger tips  stars tracing
i want
hot cocoa and ground red pepper
your hair alive with
emeralds  streaming seaside pearls
that sacred place
i want 
breath to my life 
and drinking
each from one dawn to another
impaling our thoughts ..........a
soul quenching,  wanting  thirst 
i want you.
E.
11/29/2019

© 2019 Einstein Noodle


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I really like the way you mix ideas here. The sensual alongside symbols of comfort. The emeralds and hot cocoa (albeit spicy :D). These juxtapositions speak to me of a greater depth than just a physical want. The soul wanting another soul intertwined with it perhaps.

Sometimes it’s not possible to get close enough. There are distances even in closeness that make it difficult to feel a complete sense of satisfaction.

But your poem reaches. That tenuto is inspired. What a lovely way of thinking about it. Musicality and stopping time to hold on. At least that’s how it shakes out in my head.

This is lovely work, E. Love and desire do create beautiful landscapes in the head-heart. When we step back and let them speak without fear.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

your review hits every note Ellis .. i am blessed this reached you in all the ways it should .. than.. read more
Eilis

1 Year Ago

I look forward to reading your take on the idea, perhaps. You’re very welcome, E.



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I love the combinations, the dichotomies in this love song. They go beyond mere passion and into something much deeper and dare I say it adult.
This feels, as I say, like a love song but one from afar. To another who is not there in the flesh as it were.
I could be way off beam however but I do like it. A lot.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

no...you are spot on my friend .. your read is sensitive and perceptive indeed ... feels pretty cool.. read more
A passion-filled write, full of the vibrance of life and a longing for all its beautiful things. To live to the fullest, with all the senses alive and to feel a oneness with another soul, these are the things that make it all worth it. You touch all the vital aspects of life here.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

aww thanks Divya! you made me day that this spoke to you in such a way ... luv on ya! Best Happy New.. read more
DIVYA

1 Year Ago

My pleasure dear E. Happy New Year to you & yours too. All great things are wished your way, my frie.. read more
My Mother told me i want, can't have! Nice write Gene and merry xmas to you and yours.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

same to you sir!! and many many more to come .. thank you for the read and review always ... Mom's k.. read more
'.. i want .. breath to my life .. and drinking .. each from one dawn to another .. impaling our thoughts. '

There's magic and mystery here: a marriage of both the need for spirit - and body. You ask though perhaps would like to demand.. but, you don't and - that highlights such incredible desire. Your love.song (for surely that's what this is, coming from the depth of your Self) holds the most sensitive, adoring words meant to wrap the beloved in absolute truth.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

emmajoy

1 Year Ago

Know the feeling well! Am on dry days til new yea';s eve if you mean that kind of 'tipsy'! Niece, a.. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

ahahahahaha thanks for a fine chuckle for me dahlink! no.... i meant tipsy as in trying to balance d.. read more
emmajoy

1 Year Ago

Laughing, means same when trying to keep upright!

One of my new year's resolutions: .. read more
This is so tender, so beautifully voiced, creating a sacred space of love. There is a longing that awakens the heart and soul to all that is joy... all that fulfills a life. Wondrous.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

i feel pretty gratified this spoke to you the way i meant it to read ... thanks so much for visiting.. read more
Your descriptives here are so beautiful where do you get your inspiration beautiful loved this one thanks 🙏

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

i feel so gratified and happy you enjoyed reading and that it sparked your imagination ... inspirati.. read more
Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)

1 Year Ago

Happy Xmas and safe healthy new year to you as well thanks 🙏
"I want you". Very powerful words. As powerful as "I love you". Intoxicating and sensual is this write Mr E. I feel the heat here. Hot chocolate and red hot pepper. Spicey comfort. "Your hair, alive with emeralds". You sparkle with this little write. 'impaling our thoughts', that is so good. Visual and steamy. Wonderful.

Chris

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

Christine .... you have made my day ... thank you so much for reading and sharing your thoughts and .. read more

Hey Gene.. where have I been sir....tis like I have been floundering in a thick fog... but having my eyes flung open as soon as I opened this page.... Dunno quite wot to say other than I am pretty certain these words must rank among my all time faves... well worth waiting for and so bloomin true... N :)))

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thanks Neville .. i am happy this spoke to you ... top o' the marhnin' to ya! :)
E.
Neville

1 Year Ago


it bloomin did I tell ya... night night sir...
Emeralds streaming seaside pearls to wear in my hair when Magnolias dance like Ballerinas in the seasons of time... simply Devine... Pat

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

your reviews are always stunning and your voice runs true and wondrous ... not surprised the seaside.. read more
wow what a great image:) This reminds me of the longing crave of write for me... that hunger I feel when I just taste a great line penned and I want more:) always I crave more just beyond my touch yet I keep chasing it! is it the muse is it that feeling you get when the construction is something the author enjoys or is it the thought of beauty that we can quite capture completely in words

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

probably all that and more Bad One ... thank you for reading .. its a pleasure to know your reaction.. read more

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