i Want

i Want

A Poem by Einstein Noodle

“There is an ocean in the middle of the forest.” “Say what, now?” “An ocean! In the Forest, right in front of you! See? There’s a whale! A whale!” “Oh wow,”

i Want
i want your eyes to speak as
hands that grace lilting southern magnolias ...a
tensile tenuto .... a
leaving of finger tips  stars tracing
i want
hot cocoa and ground red pepper
your hair alive with
emeralds  streaming seaside pearls
that sacred place
i want 
breath to my life 
and drinking
each from one dawn to another
impaling our thoughts ..........a
soul quenching,  wanting  thirst 
i want you.
E.
11/29/2019

© 2019 Einstein Noodle


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I really like the way you mix ideas here. The sensual alongside symbols of comfort. The emeralds and hot cocoa (albeit spicy :D). These juxtapositions speak to me of a greater depth than just a physical want. The soul wanting another soul intertwined with it perhaps.

Sometimes it’s not possible to get close enough. There are distances even in closeness that make it difficult to feel a complete sense of satisfaction.

But your poem reaches. That tenuto is inspired. What a lovely way of thinking about it. Musicality and stopping time to hold on. At least that’s how it shakes out in my head.

This is lovely work, E. Love and desire do create beautiful landscapes in the head-heart. When we step back and let them speak without fear.

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Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

your review hits every note Ellis .. i am blessed this reached you in all the ways it should .. than.. read more
Eilis

1 Year Ago

I look forward to reading your take on the idea, perhaps. You’re very welcome, E.



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Fanning myself here.....such passion....such desire! All written so elegantly and that graphic you chose to accompany your words is simply stunning! The imagery in this one is spectacular. The romance is over the top. E, this one rocks!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thanks Lydia ... always for your time and thoughts .. i don't often go to that place in writing .. y.. read more
geez, E....this is so intensely romantic...
"tensile tenuto" what a fantastic phrase with alliterative beauty...
and the picture is quite genius...
to leave those finger tip indents on our hearts...even after she leaves, there is still the slight pressure being felt...
j.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

what a smile your reveiw has brought to me face jacob ... you see the pic ... hallelujah! it says it.. read more
dear E... southern Magnolia eyes... fingers tracing stars...
wanting to experience those breathless moments when waterfalls
bring solace to a world of uncertainty... we ponder the eternal
longing for a world of wonderful atonement. truly, beautiful
in every emotion. Pat

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Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

Pat ...... thank you .... that this touched you in such a way takes me breath and words with it ... .. read more
beautiful love poetry full of yearning, I hope you succeeded, great photo also, is this your own work, if so I would like to see more, keep on writing in the free world, E, for it may not be free for long

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

no.... not my pic .. i'm really happy you mention it though ... i kind of see that whale longing for.. read more
drinking
each from one dawn to another
impaling our thoughts ..........a
soul quenching, wanting thirst
i want you.

o h .my my..but this is beautifully penned..and
" I.want" to read this again an d again..such lovely chosen words in poetic verse

nice work E

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thanks hon! i appreciate your reading and commenting .. thrilled that you would read more than once .. read more
those wants certainly do light a fire within us as do your incredibly, well-chosen words and imagery - capturing the essence of desire. for some reason made me think of, "If wishes were horses beggars would ride." also made me think of the times when i was a kid and the impatient fixation waiting for that which i wanted. the desire for our loves certainly can be the strongest want of all. maybe if you cry and stomp your feet you will be granted your heart's desire. great piece e. ... :)

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Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

well ... i think i tried the stomping bit ... didn't work for me ;} glad you enjoyed reading Pete! I.. read more
E
Man's desires . . . oh so great they are and how they call to us . . . even in our sleep!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

ahahaha yes they do! and don't ya just want to fall back to dream some more ;) thanks for reading ke.. read more
Lovely! "Breath to my life" is my favorite line.

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Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

Wandering!! what a surprise! i stopped by your place when i saw you had reviewed a poem i was readin.. read more
you made my mouth water.. but my lips were still dry.. that soul quenching, wanting thirst.. Mr. Noodle.. such a gut wrenchingly beautiful morning song to begin my day after yesterday...

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thanks olla ... that this spoke to you in such a way quenches me heart ;) thanks so much for taking .. read more

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