Failure

Failure

A Poem by Einstein Noodle


Say Something
Without words
No breath can move a
life source to the brain

Its like falling into a grain 

bin:

a quick sand death 
choked with chaff and seed dust

I can't breath
I am at a loss                  lost

without words but
stay with me and

please don't go               please

Don't Go! 


E.
12/27/20

© 2020 Einstein Noodle


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without risking failure there would be no success. better to fail than never try. bridging a divide is not an easy thing. your structure, layout and words attempt to do just that. so close, so close. we feel lost until that last step is completed. 'please don't go' - indeed ... :)

Posted 3 Months Ago


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Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

dang you touch my heart sir .. what a wonderful review to receive on this poem .. i don't know what .. read more



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I really like this one, the relatability of it, due to fear of failure... it all works together very well. It's true though, as others have said, what is success without failure? It wouldn't be nearly as satisfying, but the message you write here is great.

Posted 3 Days Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Days Ago

yes ... for sure Colacat! The natural world always seeks a balance ;) I believe you are right .. we .. read more
Yeah, interpersonal relation failures are the worst. They are much worse than career failure, and they scare more deeply. A very interesting and powerful write.

Rick

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

yes! scary indeed .. i think more especially for men .. makes things so messy ... unnecessarily ;) <.. read more
One can get up after they fall , but how unfortunate it is to not know the feeling of running. PLease don't go hit's differently in your piece, and the way you have penned this .. splendid .. what more can someone like me say ! but it is really a pleasure to visit you after sooo long ! thank you :)
With love , Ankita

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

yes! you are right about that line .. i debated on whether to include it or not .. it doesn't quite .. read more
Ankita Dwivedi

1 Month Ago

Glad you decided to keep it ! i was a bit busy in writing my 1t poetry book , and now i am more nerv.. read more
It's always a pleasure to read you, Mr. Noodle. :) I must say I have to agree with every other comment on this poem...what is success without failure? No dopamine would pump through your mind if you always succeeded and never ever failed, repetition can tend to get boring, I think. I believe that you need to fail at least once to feel the pleasure of success...si? Those last few lines tore at my heart...I honestly couldn't tell you why, but I really felt them... Like I had fallen in love with a movie character and watching his girlfriend leave him in the pouring rain (okay, I'm being a bit dramatic, lol) but I enjoyed the read!!! As always, It was so good!!!

Kindly, Nix ❤️️

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

no ... not being dramatic at all Nix .. i am really happy you felt that in the closing ... you are a.. read more
Nix is typing...

2 Months Ago

.................... :D
I always try to make my reviews kind and compassionate...I like seein.. read more
Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

:) ....................
Really nice writing! Very deep...love it!

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

thank you for taking time sedulous ..i don't recall that we have met ... i will certainly return you.. read more
Isn’t funny how powerful failure is because we only learn from our mistakes and maybe that is why we place a lot of emphasis on failures and have the scars as reminders so we try not to travel down this road again.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

yep ... i agree .. failures teach .. success encourages .. thanks for stopping one more time .. on m.. read more
Silence can be a very loud conversation and it also can hurt alot, enjoyed this

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

thanks Cassie ... yep .. sometimes it can feel like someone has freshly cut our the tongue of us eh!.. read more
It kinda makes me
think of my past toxic
relationship I was in it
was like silent dead air
a dead passion.

Failure to understand
each others hurt or our words
in silence but I became the mature one and walked away
and healed ☺

In this poem I see two lovers being lost for words as if the air has taken their breath away and they tried but it was time to go their separate ways.


Thank you for stopping by my page
I hope you and your family is staying warm and is safe. friend take care☺💛

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

thank you Benita .. we are well and safe as can be .. i appreciate your take on this and the time yo.. read more
There is usually a whole conversation going on in the mind when words are lost verbally. Please don’t go...
This says so much in a few short words

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

i appreciate you taking time Ms. Beauty! i am happy it spoke to you! love and joy
E. .. read more
If only those we cherish the most understood what their very presence adds but alas these are the one that often don't believe they are enough.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

yes! i suppose that is true .. love your take on this Pryde ... you are a sensitive and insightful w.. read more
Pryde Foltz

2 Months Ago

Sweet talker:)
Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

;) ........................... kisses baby!

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