Failure

Failure

A Poem by Einstein Noodle


Say Something
Without words
No breath can move a
life source to the brain

Its like falling into a grain 

bin:

a quick sand death 
choked with chaff and seed dust

I can't breath
I am at a loss                  lost

without words but
stay with me and

please don't go               please

Don't Go! 


E.
12/27/20

© 2020 Einstein Noodle


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without risking failure there would be no success. better to fail than never try. bridging a divide is not an easy thing. your structure, layout and words attempt to do just that. so close, so close. we feel lost until that last step is completed. 'please don't go' - indeed ... :)

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

dang you touch my heart sir .. what a wonderful review to receive on this poem .. i don't know what .. read more



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If only those we cherish the most understood what their very presence adds but alas these are the one that often don't believe they are enough.

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When you fail you feel your worst. But just remember that failure keeps you going to a better happy place.

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Einstein Noodle

1 Week Ago

yes it sure can my friend ... when there is only up left to go .. might as well grab hold and ride i.. read more
what would we do without our Muses? When the words come with every breath what good is a poet without words, the suffocation is actually painful. Love this one. (what we have here is a failure to communicate!)

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Einstein Noodle

1 Week Ago

ahahaha yes indeed .. love that movie! "...a failure to com - muni-kate." .. love your review ma'am!.. read more
Corset

1 Week Ago

Backatcha Einstein1
This is a timely message with a very special day coming up...nudge, nudge....(don't forget!). Being lost for words in any sense; be it written or spoken only results in silence, blank pages and distance, so it is important to keep the words close at hand and freely flowing. Barring that.....you can always say it with flowers...nudge, nudge....An interesting poem, Mr. Einstein. Your title word is something I struggle to comprehend and stubbornly refuse to give in to. Failure is not an option for me. 🌹

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Einstein Noodle

1 Week Ago

consider me nudged Victoria .. tho the walls, halls and in-betweens are empty at this time .. except.. read more
I rather relate to this one... as you have seen in my writing I have a love-hate relationship with words. The way silence, or words that couldn't be spoken in their moment, oppressively crush us under their weight. Will it be cathartic to scream what stifles me so? On the other hand, I can imagine the chaff and dust as being all the words we don't need. As if all the words in the world are not what we need... but rather the few drifting at the edge of our tongue. Simultaneously the most genuine, the most contrived... and so we suffocate beneath words lacking meaning, so much of what we don't need.

It reminds me of the final part of the film "5 centimeters per second" in which describing how words became that suffocating silence, the MC says, "Because the letters had already lost their meaning. Unable to grasp each other’s present, shying away from the truth that threatened our bond, from our utter estrangement. They had become nothing more than insipid rows of empty words…”

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Week Ago

yep! we do struggle for and with them don't we Esse?! the words that fail .. that choke and limit ye.. read more
The negative aspect of the word, failure.
Yet, no failure no success.
Though, there's that other failure. The failure of communication, the wrong word at the wrong time, or the greatest failure of all. The words that could have saved someone but were never spoken.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

oh..you got that right sir ... thanks so much for your sensitive and deeper reading of this ... its .. read more
Earthly chaff must perish some day...
I felt the despair in the force, the power of your request, dear E. "please don't go please Don't Go!"
Life goes, breath goes, hopefully love remains.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

yes Kitten! breath will leave in each our ends .. i am assured that love not only remains but is fin.. read more
falling into a grain bin,hope it`s shallow..the theme is right on

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

they can be deadly eh!? really happy for your visit wordman .. it reminds me i haven't stopped by yo.. read more
 wordman

3 Weeks Ago

my pleasure was off for 3 months
Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

i hope it was a positive time .. and that you are well! my time at the Cafe' these days is not as da.. read more
The yearning for connection is palpable in your words. Your chosen picture speaks to the mind of separation, but I feel something deeper like separation from the source of self. Being shaken to the core of everything we thought we understood and needing reassurance to bring the self back to center.

As vital as connection to others is, sometimes connection to or understanding of our inner world is the most important thing. Without this, connection to others can be impossible. This poem is quite poignant in its pleading. We need at all times—something—the specifics are less clear and sometimes that can be the hardest thing. Great poetry, E.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

wow! i sure appreciate the depth of your sensing into this one Ellis ..i couldn't agree more .. we h.. read more
without risking failure there would be no success. better to fail than never try. bridging a divide is not an easy thing. your structure, layout and words attempt to do just that. so close, so close. we feel lost until that last step is completed. 'please don't go' - indeed ... :)

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

dang you touch my heart sir .. what a wonderful review to receive on this poem .. i don't know what .. read more

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