Failure

Failure

A Poem by Einstein Noodle


Say Something
Without words
No breath can move a
life source to the brain

Its like falling into a grain 

bin:

a quick sand death 
choked with chaff and seed dust

I can't breath
I am at a loss                  lost

without words but
stay with me and

please don't go               please

Don't Go! 


E.
12/27/20

© 2020 Einstein Noodle


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without risking failure there would be no success. better to fail than never try. bridging a divide is not an easy thing. your structure, layout and words attempt to do just that. so close, so close. we feel lost until that last step is completed. 'please don't go' - indeed ... :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

dang you touch my heart sir .. what a wonderful review to receive on this poem .. i don't know what .. read more



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LJW
How many times have I stood silently at the end of a crumbling bridge.
There are a couple I should've backed way up on, run, and jumped. Grabbed that person and never let go.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

YES! ... i hear that loud and strong, LJW .. many times words fail us .. in most important moments ... read more
LJW

5 Months Ago

Same...........
Words are the essence of a full mind… a full breath, without words, we fall into darkness, we call for help to get us out of a sand pit ( where we can’t breath) so please get me out of this mess.
Good point noodle!
Best
B.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

yes! we can be crippled for the lack of them .. in love... in desperation ... in joy .. seems in tho.. read more
Betty Hermelee

7 Months Ago

you're very welcome!
The desperation is palpable..I can feel it..it begs the question..did they leave ?I hope not..profound..

Posted 8 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Months Ago

good morning my new found friend! thank you for stopping by .. it does beg the question doesn't it ;.. read more
Einstein Noodle

8 Months Ago

ps. "desperation" hits the mark exactly. things happen in life don't they .. and we have no control.. read more
Geez, E, I've been gone so long and one of the first poems that I read hits me in the gut bringing up feelings from my past and the lump in my throat almost chokes me. //well done, my friend, well done.

Posted 10 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

10 Months Ago

I am so happy to see you back Barbara!! Welcome Back!!!! :) thank you for reading and leaving your t.. read more
A second visit as there are no new poems from your distinguished pen Mr E. Always on returning to your work, there is something new to be gleaned. Here I thought long and hard on communication, or rather lack of it and how utterly devastating the results can be. Warm wishes from across the pond.

Chris

Posted 11 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

11 Months Ago

yes! when we want to say it and just can't get it out .. or know we should but won't ... and i so ag.. read more
Chris Shaw

11 Months Ago

I will take a peep at some of your earliest writes. You will write again, when the muse thinks it is.. read more
Einstein Noodle

11 Months Ago

thanks Chris! I have been working on another hymn poem and it is almost ready to post ... love and j.. read more
Isn't it funny how at times we lack the courage to speak our truths, we lack the courage to face head on an issue that may be so easily solved with a few mere words.

I remember having a conversation with a friend years ago. He never had a good relationship with his brother and he had not spoken to him in years and it was he who actually said 'it only takes one person to pick up the phone and make the call and then all previous issues have a chance at evaporating' it's so true. This is a strange fear.

Something I have always told my boys is - there has to be one person who is always prepared to be the better person.

Even though the above may not be in context with th poem - I can truly relate to the stranglehold lack of words can have. This is why I will always speak to force a solution when there are people I truly love involved.



Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

Oh! it is absolutely the context of the poem Elizabeth .. and i love how you put it .. we have all h.. read more
I really like this one, the relatability of it, due to fear of failure... it all works together very well. It's true though, as others have said, what is success without failure? It wouldn't be nearly as satisfying, but the message you write here is great.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

yes ... for sure Colacat! The natural world always seeks a balance ;) I believe you are right .. we .. read more
Yeah, interpersonal relation failures are the worst. They are much worse than career failure, and they scare more deeply. A very interesting and powerful write.

Rick

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

yes! scary indeed .. i think more especially for men .. makes things so messy ... unnecessarily ;) <.. read more
One can get up after they fall , but how unfortunate it is to not know the feeling of running. PLease don't go hit's differently in your piece, and the way you have penned this .. splendid .. what more can someone like me say ! but it is really a pleasure to visit you after sooo long ! thank you :)
With love , Ankita

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

yes! you are right about that line .. i debated on whether to include it or not .. it doesn't quite .. read more
Ankita Dwivedi

1 Year Ago

Glad you decided to keep it ! i was a bit busy in writing my 1t poetry book , and now i am more nerv.. read more
It's always a pleasure to read you, Mr. Noodle. :) I must say I have to agree with every other comment on this poem...what is success without failure? No dopamine would pump through your mind if you always succeeded and never ever failed, repetition can tend to get boring, I think. I believe that you need to fail at least once to feel the pleasure of success...si? Those last few lines tore at my heart...I honestly couldn't tell you why, but I really felt them... Like I had fallen in love with a movie character and watching his girlfriend leave him in the pouring rain (okay, I'm being a bit dramatic, lol) but I enjoyed the read!!! As always, It was so good!!!

Kindly, Nix ❤️️

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

no ... not being dramatic at all Nix .. i am really happy you felt that in the closing ... you are a.. read more
Nix is typing...

1 Year Ago

.................... :D
I always try to make my reviews kind and compassionate...I like seein.. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

:) ....................

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