Grace ?

Grace ?

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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a hymn form poem

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Grace ?

the tree was hung in winter ice
the day his head bent low
his heart would fail and pay a price
for love, from her, bestowed

upon a newly wedded lock
he used a damaged key
inside a place so deep it mocked
the warmth of spring's decree

she tried in vain to reach his mind
of oaken wood so dense
her own fair ferns curled up at night
to hide in heart's defense

she couldn't bridge the walls of steel
and roots so thickly held
in earth and rock and misery
bequeathed through lines of elde

she found his heart with soul and quil
she dipped in barb'd wire tears
and pierced his skull with grit and drill
revealing all she feared.
E.
02/15/2021

© 2021 Einstein Noodle


Author's Note

Einstein Noodle
https://youtu.be/3maGHyt_xOU
Emily Dickenson used the hymn form to "rebel" against a starchy society .. said to be one of those poets who were at the vanguard of Modernism. I think her "rebellion" was subtle as she used slight alterations in rhythm and stretched rhyme here and there. Hymn poetry were meant to be sung in Church and so she used theme to make her statements as well. I read that the form should be able to be sung to any worship tune you please. Like "Amazing Grace" for instance. I hope you like my little hymn form tale
E.

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“she found his heart with soul and quil
she dipped in barb'd wire tears
and pierced his skull with grit and drill
revealing all she feared.”
E., This poem is a smashing goth hymn in form and flavor. A true ‘kiss from a rose on the gray’-or on the grail more symbolically. Love, birth, death-yes. Dark and somber verses, beautifully laid. Such skillful meter and rhyme. Dickinson would be so proud of your homage. Kudos!

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

ohhhhhhhh joy to my heart young lady .. what a wonderful review you give this one. i have had it in .. read more



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I really loved this poem. It's like some dark fairy tale or nightmare or twisted nursery rhyme about a couple in some deep dark power (language like "the newly wedded lock, the damaged key" and the last stanza). You did a great job with rhyme and rhythm too. Interested in meaning of title. Just saw the above note -- I think Emily D. would approve.

Posted 1 Day Ago


Einstein Noodle

6 Hours Ago

Sherri! my new found friend :) thank you so much for reading and reviewing .. to imagine Emily givin.. read more
This poem is so extremely layered, and it makes me think she's doing anything and everything to get this man to open up to him. The darker verses make this so fun and intriguing to read, and you can feel the skillfulness, why you put some verses here, and the others there. So much thought went into this darker, beautiful poem. Full of wonderful, goth imagery again. Struggling to open up is something very relatable and personal and I can feel it all here. The last verse is painful sounding, driving home how painful this all is. Also, your author's note was very, very interesting! I loved this hymn, dark and magical and emotional, full of beautiful pictures you paint with your words again.

Posted 6 Days Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Days Ago

Colacat! what can i say? thank you!!! doing strict forms poetry helps keep me grounded for just thos.. read more
Colacat

5 Days Ago

It was my pleasure, as always! (:
Layer upon layer to read here my friend, almost a whole book if each lovely rhymical verse were to be elaborated on.
The images are vivid, frightening or haunted in places and yet a life force is driving her love on. How strong this woman is and yes "Grace" is amazing when held through adversity ...

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks for stopping and taking time Stella .. love your reactions my friend .. grateful you share th.. read more
Stella Armour

2 Weeks Ago

Am still re-reading this one E, how painful it is her trying to reach him and his defence so damn so.. read more
Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

yes! exactly .. but she won't give up on it will she ;)
This is a sad tale of two lovers who for one reason or another could never understand each other and truly connect this causing the love to die. Very descriptive and many outstanding lines

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

tha's it Ms. Beauty, my new found friend! thanks so much for your time .. reading and i am happy hap.. read more
Your narrative voice here is simply astounding, with an added chill for impact. You do know you blow me away, right?

I've missed you dear friend. Hope you know you're always thought of!

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

Legs ... my beautiful Legs!!! ;)))))))))))))))))) my schedule has been upended and forms and reforms.. read more
I do love this piece.. both the meter and the message.. the damaged key made me think of love on the rebound. at my age I have met many in their second and even multiple dips in the inkwell.. someone once described it as dealing with buttons that someone else had installed.. well done..

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

ooooo what a review .. should be a poem in itself .. certainly a lot of material in that experience .. read more
Dear E, such depths to this poem! As always, magnificent piece...the levels and layers to this are astounding. How often does one become hard as tree bark in the face of such things and what lies underneath that...your poetry makes me think E. Love the dark quality within this, my kinda poem...be well my friend :)

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

ohhhhhhhhhh yes .. there is the darkness isn't there ... needs be broken through but most assuredly .. read more
Woah this is woven in deep sublime metaphor, many men's minds are dense like oak as to the sentiments of their women i guess. This was intense and awesomely expressed in classic style rhyme that i enjoy so much. Kudos!

Plz do read and comment my newest poem too .

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

i will check that out S ......... thank you for taking time and your positive review .. i agree .. m.. read more
Such true poetry here with meter and rhyme Gene, nice work, great story telling. The first time ive read this style of yours like a period type poem all worldly of an era gone by.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

now my friend ..that is a perfect review as those were the things I aimed at ... as you know any for.. read more
andrew mitchell

1 Month Ago

I must be good! I sure can pick em! Figjam says I
Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

yes.... you must be! :))))))))))))))))))))))))
This has a legendary feel to me. Or it did before I read your notes. Preferring to see my own meanings. After reading your notes my view didn't change as to how good this is.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

that would be an 'ell of a deal to ruin a poem with an author's note :))))))))))) thanks buddy! glad.. read more
Ken Simm.

1 Month Ago

You are more than welcome. got my first two weeks ago next is at the end of next month.
Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

fantastic .. my small populated, large area County had just 10 active cases last week ... being reti.. read more

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