Grace ?

Grace ?

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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a hymn form poem

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Grace ?

the tree was hung in winter ice
the day his head bent low
his heart would fail and pay a price
for love, from her, bestowed

upon a newly wedded lock
he used a damaged key
inside a place so deep it mocked
the warmth of spring's decree

she tried in vain to reach his mind
of oaken wood so dense
her own fair ferns curled up at night
to hide in heart's defense

she couldn't bridge the walls of steel
and roots so thickly held
in earth and rock and misery
bequeathed through lines of elde

she found his heart with soul and quil
she dipped in barb'd wire tears
and pierced his skull with grit and drill
revealing all she feared.
E.
02/15/2021

© 2021 Einstein Noodle


Author's Note

Einstein Noodle
https://youtu.be/3maGHyt_xOU
Emily Dickenson used the hymn form to "rebel" against a starchy society .. said to be one of those poets who were at the vanguard of Modernism. I think her "rebellion" was subtle as she used slight alterations in rhythm and stretched rhyme here and there. Hymn poetry were meant to be sung in Church and so she used theme to make her statements as well. I read that the form should be able to be sung to any worship tune you please. Like "Amazing Grace" for instance. I hope you like my little hymn form tale
E.

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einstein.... a fantastic write!!! 👍 ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
well done, & I can understand it too, amazing 😀
(except the word 'elde' couldn't find it in any dictionary when I googled it. (i do know it's a river in germany.)
please do write more of this more narrative style, rhyming or not, instead of those unrelated random thoughts posing as free verse poetry. i know it takes a bit more time & effort in drafting & editing many times, but it's worth it.
you've made my day E.
cheerio carola

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

why thank you young lady .. i would take a different position on my "other random thoughts posing..... read more
Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

ps. elde simply means the eldest and in this poem i mean it to reflect a lineage of thick headed and.. read more



Reviews

Your poem is a haunting and evocative exploration of the complexities of love and loss, and the ways in which we struggle to connect with one another amidst the barriers of our own pain and fear. The use of imagery, such as "the tree was hung in winter ice" and "her own fair ferns curled up at night," creates a sense of both beauty and foreboding, while the juxtaposition of "oaken wood" and "barb'd wire tears" adds a touch of rawness and vulnerability. Your words convey a sense of both longing and despair, and the final lines, "revealing all she feared," are both chilling and cathartic. Your poem is a testament to the power of language to capture the essence of the human experience, and to help us find meaning and solace in the face of our deepest fears.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

oh my goodness B!! your review is so kind, sensitive and thorough ... i'm tempted to think my "stuff.. read more
Wow...I find it hard to put into words how beautiful this piece is.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

knocked ya speachless did it!?? :))))))))))) thank you very much Super! i could not ask for more fro.. read more
supernova_thoughts

2 Years Ago

Did that and loved how it perfectly fit. Good luck with more!!
Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

ahahaha .. well thank you triply for that Super! really delighted you did :)))))))))))))))))))))))
I love this one of the best I’ve ever read

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

that means a lot to me Julie! thank you very much!
You are very good at this style! I don’t know why you don’t do more of it. I could learn from you! 🙂.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

thank you again for taking time ... Emily Dickenson lived a life and wrote poetry that many relate t.. read more
I liked your little hymn a lot. And having been recently schooled about meter I recognized iambic meter and now know that's why it has perfect rhythm. And my brain is working overtime to place 'she'. Either she is a wood nymph who sits in his shade writing of him, between torture sessions with the drill sampling his core counting tree rings of time. Or 'she' is Spring thawing his frozen locked heart. Excellent poem that has me reading and rereading and rereading and.....thinking!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

man you have made my morning with laughter sir .. i love your thoughts in this review ... she could .. read more
William Michael Reeves

2 Years Ago

My time in your mind is well spent!
einstein.... a fantastic write!!! 👍 ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
well done, & I can understand it too, amazing 😀
(except the word 'elde' couldn't find it in any dictionary when I googled it. (i do know it's a river in germany.)
please do write more of this more narrative style, rhyming or not, instead of those unrelated random thoughts posing as free verse poetry. i know it takes a bit more time & effort in drafting & editing many times, but it's worth it.
you've made my day E.
cheerio carola

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

why thank you young lady .. i would take a different position on my "other random thoughts posing..... read more
Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

ps. elde simply means the eldest and in this poem i mean it to reflect a lineage of thick headed and.. read more
LOVE this write! And I DID sing the stanzas to the tune of Amazing Grace and it worked very well. ~Sharon

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

ahahaha .. you sang it eh!? :))))))))))))))))))))))))) thanks for visiting Miss Sharon .. always .. .. read more
Being old school I was drawn to this poem like a moth to a flame. What can I say, I liked it enough to come away burnt. Well written.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

JE! nice to have you visit me pages! Yes! old school can teach us all eh!? how ironic Emily heralded.. read more
This is an imaginative poem that speaks to the ways of nature. Thank you for sharing this work of yours.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

Hi Carlos!! thanks for the visit and taking time to review .. will repay the kindness shortly... yes.. read more
Really wonderful write, love the flow and the way the Rhyme goes. ;-]

Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

that's the magic of Hymn form ... ;) thank you for reading and letting me know you thoughts Ms. Will.. read more

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