Grace ?

Grace ?

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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a hymn form poem

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Grace ?

the tree was hung in winter ice
the day his head bent low
his heart would fail and pay a price
for love, from her, bestowed

upon a newly wedded lock
he used a damaged key
inside a place so deep it mocked
the warmth of spring's decree

she tried in vain to reach his mind
of oaken wood so dense
her own fair ferns curled up at night
to hide in heart's defense

she couldn't bridge the walls of steel
and roots so thickly held
in earth and rock and misery
bequeathed through lines of elde

she found his heart with soul and quil
she dipped in barb'd wire tears
and pierced his skull with grit and drill
revealing all she feared.
E.
02/15/2021

© 2021 Einstein Noodle


Author's Note

Einstein Noodle
https://youtu.be/3maGHyt_xOU
Emily Dickenson used the hymn form to "rebel" against a starchy society .. said to be one of those poets who were at the vanguard of Modernism. I think her "rebellion" was subtle as she used slight alterations in rhythm and stretched rhyme here and there. Hymn poetry were meant to be sung in Church and so she used theme to make her statements as well. I read that the form should be able to be sung to any worship tune you please. Like "Amazing Grace" for instance. I hope you like my little hymn form tale
E.

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“she found his heart with soul and quil
she dipped in barb'd wire tears
and pierced his skull with grit and drill
revealing all she feared.”
E., This poem is a smashing goth hymn in form and flavor. A true ‘kiss from a rose on the gray’-or on the grail more symbolically. Love, birth, death-yes. Dark and somber verses, beautifully laid. Such skillful meter and rhyme. Dickinson would be so proud of your homage. Kudos!

Posted 4 Months Ago


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Einstein Noodle

4 Months Ago

ohhhhhhhh joy to my heart young lady .. what a wonderful review you give this one. i have had it in .. read more



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Really wonderful write, love the flow and the way the Rhyme goes. ;-]

Posted 5 Days Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Days Ago

that's the magic of Hymn form ... ;) thank you for reading and letting me know you thoughts Ms. Will.. read more
Love this, the rhythm and rhyme sounds lovely, lets it flow. Plus my g'daughter name is Grace ;-)

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

thank you for taking time Lisa! I think Grace is a beautiful name for one's grand daughter! I imagin.. read more
This was excellent to read. Your form, rhyme and rhythm are exquisite in this as well as the story. Great writing, Einstein. Putting this in my favorites. :)

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

so blessed you decided to library this one .. i am not typically a form person but have had it in me.. read more
great write mr e,spiritual and profound

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

hey Wordman!! great to see you ... thanks for taking time my friend! and for letting me know ... bes.. read more
 wordman

1 Month Ago

you`re welcome
Wow beautiful poem, I enjoyed it

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

thanks Tina! so nice to see you here on me pages! glad you enjoyed.
E.
Tina

1 Month Ago

Your welcome
This poem is so good. So many statements stood out to me.
"she couldn't bridge the walls of steel
and roots so thickly held
in earth and rock and misery
bequeathed through lines of elde"
The above lines. I did like. This would be great opening for a book. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

damn Coyote! you make me feel so gratified .. thanks so much for your many visits and letting me kno.. read more
Coyote Poetry

1 Month Ago

This poem was so good. Made the reader want more. You are welcome my friend.
I really loved this poem. It's like some dark fairy tale or nightmare or twisted nursery rhyme about a couple in some deep dark power (language like "the newly wedded lock, the damaged key" and the last stanza). You did a great job with rhyme and rhythm too. Interested in meaning of title. Just saw the above note -- I think Emily D. would approve.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

Sherri! my new found friend :) thank you so much for reading and reviewing .. to imagine Emily givin.. read more
This poem is so extremely layered, and it makes me think she's doing anything and everything to get this man to open up to him. The darker verses make this so fun and intriguing to read, and you can feel the skillfulness, why you put some verses here, and the others there. So much thought went into this darker, beautiful poem. Full of wonderful, goth imagery again. Struggling to open up is something very relatable and personal and I can feel it all here. The last verse is painful sounding, driving home how painful this all is. Also, your author's note was very, very interesting! I loved this hymn, dark and magical and emotional, full of beautiful pictures you paint with your words again.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

Colacat! what can i say? thank you!!! doing strict forms poetry helps keep me grounded for just thos.. read more
Colacat

2 Months Ago

It was my pleasure, as always! (:
Layer upon layer to read here my friend, almost a whole book if each lovely rhymical verse were to be elaborated on.
The images are vivid, frightening or haunted in places and yet a life force is driving her love on. How strong this woman is and yes "Grace" is amazing when held through adversity ...

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

Thanks for stopping and taking time Stella .. love your reactions my friend .. grateful you share th.. read more
Stella Armour

2 Months Ago

Am still re-reading this one E, how painful it is her trying to reach him and his defence so damn so.. read more
Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

yes! exactly .. but she won't give up on it will she ;)
This is a sad tale of two lovers who for one reason or another could never understand each other and truly connect this causing the love to die. Very descriptive and many outstanding lines

Posted 3 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

tha's it Ms. Beauty, my new found friend! thanks so much for your time .. reading and i am happy hap.. read more

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