Grace ?

Grace ?

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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a hymn form poem

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Grace ?

the tree was hung in winter ice
the day his head bent low
his heart would fail and pay a price
for love, from her, bestowed

upon a newly wedded lock
he used a damaged key
inside a place so deep it mocked
the warmth of spring's decree

she tried in vain to reach his mind
of oaken wood so dense
her own fair ferns curled up at night
to hide in heart's defense

she couldn't bridge the walls of steel
and roots so thickly held
in earth and rock and misery
bequeathed through lines of elde

she found his heart with soul and quil
she dipped in barb'd wire tears
and pierced his skull with grit and drill
revealing all she feared.
E.
02/15/2021

© 2021 Einstein Noodle


Author's Note

Einstein Noodle
https://youtu.be/3maGHyt_xOU
Emily Dickenson used the hymn form to "rebel" against a starchy society .. said to be one of those poets who were at the vanguard of Modernism. I think her "rebellion" was subtle as she used slight alterations in rhythm and stretched rhyme here and there. Hymn poetry were meant to be sung in Church and so she used theme to make her statements as well. I read that the form should be able to be sung to any worship tune you please. Like "Amazing Grace" for instance. I hope you like my little hymn form tale
E.

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“she found his heart with soul and quil
she dipped in barb'd wire tears
and pierced his skull with grit and drill
revealing all she feared.”
E., This poem is a smashing goth hymn in form and flavor. A true ‘kiss from a rose on the gray’-or on the grail more symbolically. Love, birth, death-yes. Dark and somber verses, beautifully laid. Such skillful meter and rhyme. Dickinson would be so proud of your homage. Kudos!

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

ohhhhhhhh joy to my heart young lady .. what a wonderful review you give this one. i have had it in .. read more



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The lyrical verses belie the heavy subject matter in this incredible write, E. He had loved before and she was determined to break through his walls to find the real man. Unfortunately, when she did, what she found was not so pretty. The rhyming is flawless. You did an amazing job with the form, E. Kudos to you! A pleasure to read...and I read it aloud to get the full sing songy feel of it. Lydi**

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

you are so kind my friend ... what a gratifying and encouraging review .. sounds like you felt the w.. read more
Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

ps. i tried to sing it to amazing grace in me noodle but the story and words distracted me .. i woul.. read more
"she dipped in barb'd wire tears"
intense piece of
artistic expression
this hymn form is
most profound driving
each line with feeling
to the reader the rhyme
theme and cadence
spot on ..i read it to
the amazing Grace tune
wise a perfect fit
indeed ..nice work E;

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

ohhhhhhhhhh thanks so very much .. so happy you gave it the "fit" test to Amazing Grace. I suppose t.. read more
  Fran Marie

2 Months Ago

and reading this
lets me know you
can write poetry yes;
yes you can;
“she found his heart with soul and quil
she dipped in barb'd wire tears
and pierced his skull with grit and drill
revealing all she feared.”
E., This poem is a smashing goth hymn in form and flavor. A true ‘kiss from a rose on the gray’-or on the grail more symbolically. Love, birth, death-yes. Dark and somber verses, beautifully laid. Such skillful meter and rhyme. Dickinson would be so proud of your homage. Kudos!

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

ohhhhhhhh joy to my heart young lady .. what a wonderful review you give this one. i have had it in .. read more
This was such a beautiful poem, and such a smooth read, too! As always, Mr. Noodle, I loved this poem!!!! I loved the metered ABAB rhyme (or hymn as you put it) and thought it was very skillfully and tastefully done! Fantastic work!!!

100/100

Nix ❤️
(Oh, and Happy Presidents' Day!! [Wait, is that something people say? Lol, I don't know, but I enjoyed this read.])

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

well .. Happy President's Day to you too! And thank you so much for your encouraging review .. i hav.. read more
dearest Gene... having spent many hours in a Choir in Church every weekend in the 50’s... I can identify with your Hymn of Worship. “I come to the Garden alone... while the Dew is still on the Roses” was my favorite. My heart has a Murmur... and a bit of thunder. truly, Pat


Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

I am so glad this brought good memories of your Church and singing worship hymns .. the cadence make.. read more
It's artful. The hymn underscores the terror of the words.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

it is kind of a horror story isn't it?! ;) thanks for sharing you thoughts on it Emily .. i apprecia.. read more
Emily B

2 Months Ago

Good to read you

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