Touch

Touch

A Poem by Einstein Noodle

Touch starved: Definition, symptoms, and coping
Touch
ebony hair ablaze with shine
in the daylight
a waterfall cascade of starbright

this   patterned index started with
ridges as the Saw toothed Mountains 
that nick smokey clouded heights and

sweeps misted valleys

hollow walls make spaces for souls and 
demons just as easily

our luggage packed haphazard
 ...... willy nilly in 
frenzied, chaotic dancing wisps
stuffed between soft, brown, leather lids
zippered shut
 
private intricacies squeezed between lips 
clicked shutter tight
 .............. pictures that captured and

freyed sayings much over done

the weight loads one shoulder 
then; another beyond balance 
winding about the neck
like cobwebs
                                       hanging            and             dangling
          at odd angles 

touching

E.
02/14/2022

© 2022 Einstein Noodle


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Not sure about the need for first three stanzas, but I do like saw toothed mountains so yes, a ponderous picture of heavy issues sealed in Pandora's boxes. I like the rhythm, form and the way that you typically go for broke as in the golfer's lament - never up; never in!

Posted 3 Months Ago


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Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

thanks so much for your honesty my new found friend .. not a golfer so haven't heard to phrase ... b.. read more



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Since I live i the Appalachians, I can surely appreciate your vivid images of this journey with the mist in the valleys, so clear and colorful....you seem overloaded with equipment, not sure exactly where you're heading, but it really doesn't matter...one shoulder over weighted... moving, emotions, touching other as one hugs a tree, it;s more than just mountains.... it's the intertwining of people and moods.
Best, B

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Betty Hermelee

2 Weeks Ago

You're very welcome Einstein!

p.s please respond in kind
Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

i do try Betty ... ;)
Betty Hermelee

2 Weeks Ago

I appreciate it!
"the weight loads one shoulder
then; another beyond balance
winding about the neck
like cobwebs" ... this stanza brought to mind myself, walking through the local countryside with my camera gear hanging about me. There is certainly something photographic (or even cinematic) about this poem. Some very interesting imagery, which will probably mean different things to different people, but that's OK - like looking at a surrealist painting. I'm a huge fan of Magritte, and your poem could easily be a written poetic interpretation of one of his works!... "frayed sayings much over done" is a delightful line!

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

thank you for your visit Robert and encouraging review .. my "voice" is abstract and so yes .. can b.. read more
Mr. E, your writing evokes strong images that make it easy to picture someone trying to manage multiple pieces of overloaded luggage....and, in a hurry. I hope I interpreted it correctly. I hope you will stop by and review some of my work. I'm be interested in what you think. My style is much different from yours. Thank you for sharing your talents. Temp

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

i will be happy to walk down your streets ... right here at the Cafe' .. and thank you so much for v.. read more
I simply love the opening line :) Through touching we let life introduce itself to us I suppose, and many things can be done with touch. I like the direction your writing has taken me dear author :)) My favorite line is:
''hollow walls make spaces for souls and
demons just as easily''

You nailed it!


Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

thank you for taking the time to read and let me know your impressions .. i feel pretty good this sp.. read more
Ana B.

1 Month Ago

Aways a pleasure my friend 🙂
You can’t guess how many times I watched this video seeing you in.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

:) ............................ thank you!
the weight loads one shoulder
then; another beyond balance
winding about the neck
like cobwebs

These are the feelings which I had first time felt in those mountains, I was missing my other shoulder side. Very sensitive feeling, makes me feel how deep you think about, really felt like single mom. The depth for the touch I could see your intent in video song, can’t see how you are running, felt like you may fall, amazing capture of your emotion, how will I know about you until you express what it means I for you, as you never revealed. I miss you, great expression of your feelings in much more deeper way. Nice poem, feeling your love and thoughts.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

thank you :)
"pictures that captured and

freyed sayings much over done"


Posted 2 Months Ago


"sweeps misted valleys

hollow walls make spaces for souls and
demons just as easily"

Posted 2 Months Ago


Whoeeee! Your writes are satisfying and gratifying for the senses even the touch. A wonderful song to add a cherry on the cake. You are a craftsman of wondrous poetry which I find unique and have depths of messages.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

thank you so much Sami! we are getting to be long time friends here aren't we .. the appreciation yo.. read more
Sami Khalil

2 Months Ago

Yes siiiirrrrr. All true and well said. You are welcome sir Einstein.
oh wow, that's intense, LOL, you touch, and flee, everchanging, love it hon, :D great read!
great video!

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

:)))))))))))) i like the way you put that Knightngale! very much appreciate the energy i feel from y.. read more
knighngale

2 Months Ago

naughty boy

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