Touch

Touch

ebony hair ablaze with shine

in the daylight

a waterfall cascade of starbright

this   patterned index started with

ridges as the Saw toothed Mountains 

that nick smokey clouded heights and

sweeps misted valleys

hollow walls make spaces for souls and 

demons just as easily

our luggage packed haphazard

 ...... willy nilly in 

frenzied, chaotic dancing wisps

stuffed between soft, brown, leather lids

zippered shut

 

private intricacies squeezed between lips 

clicked shutter tight

 .............. pictures that captured and

freyed sayings much over done

the weight loads one shoulder 

then; another beyond balance 

winding about the neck

like cobwebs

                                       hanging            and             dangling

          at odd angles 

touching

E.

02/14/2022

Author's Note

Reviews

[Mike Keenan]

Not sure about the need for first three stanzas, but I do like saw toothed mountains so yes, a ponderous picture of heavy issues sealed in Pandora's boxes. I like the rhythm, form and the way that you typically go for broke as in the golfer's lament - never up; never in!

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks so much for your honesty my new found friend .. not a golfer so haven't heard to phrase ... but i like it ... more brings to mind my present love life tho :))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))) not to be concerned for me tho .. i am old and past all that nonsense ...not! ;) ... sorry the V1-3 failed to touch you .... but i love your review!
E.

[knighngale]

oh wow, that's intense, LOL, you touch, and flee, everchanging, love it hon, :D great read!
great video!

[Einstein Noodle]

:)))))))))))) i like the way you put that Knightngale! very much appreciate the energy i feel from your words ... so happy you like it! peace and joy!
E.
ps. thanks so much for mentioning the video ... it took a while to find one i liked that would fit my intent. :) love and grace

[knighngale]

naughty boy

[JE Falcon]

A lot in the way of visions, and even things to think about, many things for a while. --- Thanks for the words, --- "hollow walls make spaces for souls and
demons just as easily" --- and for the ride.

[Einstein Noodle]

you are certainly most welcome and thank you too sir! for taking time and I feel pretty gratified you are "thinking" ..couldn't ask fo more but you also point out a line i think is an important one .. so very helpful to me
E.

[JE Falcon]

Feedback, when presented correctly, can be helpful. Have a great day.

[KAREN]

the weight loads one shoulder
then; another beyond balance
winding about the neck
like cobwebs
This is a great stanza and the ending ties it all together! Poem itself is well crafted!

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Karen .. for reading with sensitivity and a critical eye .. appreciate you for sure!
E.

[KAREN]

You're welcome!

[Vertigo Cat1111]

The visuals in this are beautiful. This entire piece is beautiful and full of raw passion, I thoroughly enjoyed it. The flow was enjoyable and just right. Mountains have always been one of my favorite things ever, I find them to have their own kind of beauty, so when a poem can capture them that’s when you know you did something right. Thank you so much for sharing!

[Einstein Noodle]

oh man! i am over gratified by your remarks Ms. Vertigo .. so nice to have your visit .. mountains do have it in them don't they ... i have seen the oceans as well .. it was nice ... but now and always me ol' heart belongs to the Mountains and streams .. enough time to flow down into those vast ponds eh!? thank you for your very encouraging review .. you blessed me heart!
E.

[Coyote Poetry]

I loved the flow of words and thoughts Einstein. They danced to perfect meaning. You create thoughts and visions for the reader. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Einstein Noodle]

and thank you always for your support, Johnny! it's important to me. glad you found something in this one the spoke to you .. see ya 'round eh!? right here at the Cafe'
E.

[Coyote Poetry]

I did my friend, and you are welcome.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This reminded me of the book, Bridges of Madison County, for some reason...the photography and romance mix I think. I love the writing of Robert James Waller. He's so talented. I enjoyed your poem and like the staggered lines for emphasis. I enjoyed the read.

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you for digging into this one Fabian! much appreciate the feed back! the movie was one of my Norma's favorites and she kept after me to watch it with her .. i finally did and could have kicked them both in the head for the ending .. good movie tho .. and Norma was happy ;) not familiar with Mr. Waller .. i am not much educated .. will check him out tho .. thanks again for taking time sir! stay well and safe out there.
E.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I've not been getting my notifications here. So I apologize for not responding sooner. Yes, definitely check out Waller. I recommend "Border Music" by him to read. I'm not so familiar with movies as with books. I could tell you Clint Eastwood played in the movie and that's about it. Sometimes the books are not the same as the movies but generally the books are better. One exception that I recall was Stand By Me. The movie was made from Stephen King's story, "The Body" and it's almost exactly the same. I'm certain King had a say in the making. The characters are perfectly visualized by the people playing the parts. I was delighted with it. Education is a relative concept. I've known many a college professor who couldn't build a house or grow a garden. My dad was a brilliant man but didn't have much in the way of a college education. But he could build anything, take motors apart and reassemble them, electric or gasoline engines, he could repair televisions and Ham radios and CB radios. He was a sewing machine expert and could even repair broken watches. He had a library of how-to manuals but not much in the way of novels, poetry or philosophy. He was a very pragmatic person. His favorite pastime was fishing. ;) I like a bit of fishing myself. I will definitely try my best to stay well and wish the same for you. Bless. F.

[Einstein Noodle]

your Da sounds like quite the man, Fabian. i feel kind of honored you shared a bit about him with me .. he sounds like the kind of a guy most anyone could sit down and have a beer with .. :) Love Steven King .. read most of his stuff but, honestly ... after a while i started to see his "formulae" .. and drifted away from him; but Stand by Me is a great story and movie, in my opinion ... the time period is when I was growing up .. most movies in that slot appeal to me .. and this one had some fine and very young, upcoming actors ... having a ball in Arkansas .. hope the same for you sir!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Yes sir, dad was also a WWII veteran and served in a Beach Battalion in the Asiatic Pacific theater. He fought the Japanese in several different engagements and came home with a steel plate where his ankle used to be. He carried a Thompson Machine Gun or Tommy Gun as his standard service weapon. His service patch had the Thompson framed by rockets on either side. The rockets represented his ship, a LSMR (landing ship medium rocket). He was a real hero and still is to me. Bless.

[Einstein Noodle]

God bless him and so many others as well.

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Awesome poem with hollows mountains and fine imagery as well as trip tour word choices so poetic wow!. Kudos for this great poem!

Plz do read and comment my newest poem too

[Einstein Noodle]

ok! i will do that ... thank you for stopping and taking time .. really feel gratified you enjoyed this one .. love and peace
E.

[Miss Sharon]

(private intricacies squeezed between lips clicked shutter tight) This provokes many lovely thoughts for me kind sir! Love the entire post E. ~Sharon

[Einstein Noodle]

ohhhhhhh i am truly blessed this morning Sharon! thank you for making it so with such a kind review .. love and joy on ya! :)
E.

[lightsong]

First I have an ebony hair (ok mine is dark as the night) so YUPIIII!!! because I feel now the Goddess of this poem in her goodness and badness lol. yes that what I feel here, mother nature in her finest and wildest moods, her gentlest and angriest touches, her mysterious and peaceful natures, sure a real woman can embodies it all. of course your style here is YOUR style and You took us into a journey of your own ink. I feel like I am in a fairy tale...

[lightsong]

OMG! I was reviewing You while You were reviewing me LOL

[Einstein Noodle]

wonderful wonderful Ms. Lightsong!!! i am blessed we are connected in such a way ... in how you immersed yourself in my poem and ... that we were indeed reviewing each other's "stuff" at the same time ... never happened before .. at least that i know of ... pretty darn cool in my opinion! luv and joy
E.

[lightsong]

Luv and Joy back at You Mr. Wonderful E ;>