Thud

Thud

A Poem by Einstein Noodle


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              THUD

Maybe that's the sound?

muddied crossings on forests' floors
the sound of cotton dampened, 
heavy hammer
                              
thud

when the roots and roofs of things
are shaken and
people are fading in desperate
black alley corners
alleys of disquiet 
urine musk and ...... wet cardboard

we draw away

thud

i can almost see

but who am I to sing the sounds of things
I have never been there
never witnessed
never heard the 
trees falling alone .. in the forest.
never dared the alley.
never slept there.

© 2023 Einstein Noodle


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mou
"alleys of disquiet
urine musk and ...... wet cardboard"
Some lows are beyond imagination and question every belief. I love how 'Thud' transcends through different measures. My interpretation: for victims, it is the sound of the extreme below which nothing remains to get broken. for us: it is the hammer to make us grateful, (towards own blessings) and empathetic (for the victims). for almighty God: it the the sound of defeat from believers. It is a heartfelt write. '...trees falling alone...'. Your metaphors speak volumes!
- mou

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

8 Months Ago

i can not feel more gratified to receive such a review, Mou ... ever so thankful .. blessings of pea.. read more
mou

8 Months Ago

Thank you so much, E. I love your poems that demand an undivided attention and they deserve it. It i.. read more



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One person's sad reality is another's unimaginable circumstance. The old adage of "there, but for the grace of God, go I" seems to get lost and displaced more frequently in today's culture than ever. I think people who have experienced poverty are more generous to the poor than the wealthy. I think those who have known homelessness personally are generally more understanding of the condition than those who have not. As someone who has known poverty and homelessness, firsthand, I've seen those views validated. Mine was a circumstance of my upbringing and my dedication to my mother who I cared for the last five years of her life. When she passed away I had to start my life all over having spent my retirement trying not to be a financial burden to my mom while working eighteen hour days as a caregiver without pay. But people I did not even know who were by no means wealthy (except in love) stepped up to help me get on my feet again. Yes, I worked hard but the opportunities provided allowed me to return to the workforce...transportation, food and shelter as I struggled to reenter society at ground level. After I had some success in my endeavors the well-intentioned came around to pat me on the back and praise my fortitude. The REAL struggle was the five years of doing everything for my mom for which none of them praised me for until recently. It's difficult to understand someone else's troubles when you have none of your own. If I had it to do over I would make the same decision to help my mother, even knowing it would lead to my own health failing and becoming homeless. But I feel blessed to know I was able to care and give when and where it was needed most by someone who meant more than life to me. I just wish she could have lived to see her final grandchild. My youngest reminds me so much of my mom, she has her eyes and her smile. I just hope she's in heaven looking down with a smile of her own. I enjoyed reading this. Thank you for sharing. F.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

i think there is a lot of truth in what you say and a big thank you for sharing this part of your li.. read more
Fabian G. Franklin

1 Month Ago

"i know all her adult life she reached out to heaven on my behalf ... wouldn't had made it otherwise.. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

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mou
"alleys of disquiet
urine musk and ...... wet cardboard"
Some lows are beyond imagination and question every belief. I love how 'Thud' transcends through different measures. My interpretation: for victims, it is the sound of the extreme below which nothing remains to get broken. for us: it is the hammer to make us grateful, (towards own blessings) and empathetic (for the victims). for almighty God: it the the sound of defeat from believers. It is a heartfelt write. '...trees falling alone...'. Your metaphors speak volumes!
- mou

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

8 Months Ago

i can not feel more gratified to receive such a review, Mou ... ever so thankful .. blessings of pea.. read more
mou

8 Months Ago

Thank you so much, E. I love your poems that demand an undivided attention and they deserve it. It i.. read more
Powerful work...you create empathy for the less fortunate with your vivid words. Great job.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Months Ago

thank you Sir Case ... for taking time to find and read .. and for letting me know you were here .. .. read more
It’s tragedy of life that there are so many numbers in streets and growing each day
Wonderful write ✍️

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thanks for reading and commenting Jules!! always appreciate you :)
E.
may I suggest, "Human..."
Life isn't fair, and nothing is ever "free". But we - people - can feel beyond ourselves and the empathy makes a difference.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

yes!! Human ... i watched a movie about Native Cultures in which they called themselves "human being.. read more
Chris

1 Year Ago

YOU have a memorable Day E...
Chris
such powerful poetry along with video. the ultimate humbling. draw away indeed - a side of life that many of us prefer not to see or know about. life happens whether we like it or not. we are all one step away from humility. the "thud" - perhaps when the other shoe drops ... :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

i am humbled and feel gratified by your sensitive review Pete ... thank you so much for taking time .. read more
This poem spoke to me of despair, the ugly side of life, the sounds and smells of a less than desirable world. There are so many realities out there, so many lives being lived in such vastly different circumstances, such incomparable chasms of wealth, well being and happiness. Some have it all, some a little less than them and some have nothing but the sound of 'Thud". I'm so happy the poet never witnessed it. It doesn't read pretty. Wonderful poetry, dear E.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thank you Divya .. i can feel your empathy .. hugs and best of the day to ya!
E.
AYVID N

1 Year Ago

You're always welcome, my friend.
I spent a brief time homeless when I was younger full of angst and drinking myself to oblivion. I used to refer to it as being "out of doors" There were entire communities of people that slept on the river banks on the River Trail mostly filled with young runaways and junkies, self-medicating mentally Ill folks that society deemed unimportant it is easy to disconnect from a world that disconnected from you long before and it is easy to find refuge in resignation in a nation that has no nurture for you! Thud is a good sound for this

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thank you Bunny Man .. for your heart felt read and review .. it is far more clear for those who hav.. read more
What a sincerely dramatic poem, it hits home, but should wallop one's need to help, nudge our help no matter how little. shove each and every one of us to think what pitch dark means to the lost people of our world.

My review appeared as a load of rubbish, no idea wh which must have looked t terrible.. even worse a glitch under the circumstances.



Posted 1 Year Ago


emmajoygreen

11 Months Ago

I thought we were friends looking over the hedge.. as we have for so many years...
Einstein Noodle

10 Months Ago

dear emmajoy ... we still are as far as i know .. what makes you ask?? i was not active here for mon.. read more
emmajoygreen

10 Months Ago

Maybe a glitch, happens, certainly have been a few lately. However, as long as you and I are still f.. read more
I often contrast those sorry 'THUDS' with the quasimillion salaries and contracts that seem to be handed out ever more often as the years pass
It is a broken system

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

well ... certainly there are parts of the system that are broken .. many not needed .. and we ... on.. read more

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