‘Circle Of One’

What has become of the circle of one...turned to strife...🌹

‘Circle Of One’

What has become
Of
The circle
The spirit
Of one

The circle of
Life
Is so
Full
Of strife

I walked
I felt
The earth

The heart

Of ‘Mother Earth’
Suffocates
In pain
Hurt
And
Shame

Do they carry no shame

Contributing
To all the worlds
Pain

Some worthless game

What have we done-

Destroying precious
Lives
It’s not just
‘Some’
It’s ‘someone’

Has the world
Become dumb

Numb
Deaf
Heartless

Shame be
To your name
Why do you play this
Wicked game-

Shame upon your name

The pain
The hurt

The earth is dying
And not enough people

Trying

The world is dying

People are lying

The ‘circle of one’
What have we done

What can we do to
Restore
Your life back
To you

What can we do-

The tears I’ve cried
And inside I’ve died
For the souls
Suffering
Without
Deserving

For the suffering
Of
‘Motherkind’

I need you to know
There are those who
Show remorse
And do have
Love
For you

For you we’ll do
Whatever we can do
To strive to
Protect you

To make a change
In
‘Mother Earths’
Name

We won’t play
This game
That’s brought
All this shame

We promise to do
What we can
to
Renew
The circle of
Life to you.

Kelly Fagelund-Gjersoe
04/08/2019

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

i think the repetitions lend strength to this poem..your theme is relevant and sadly too true ..tho of course there are great unsung heroes about that we never hear of... ;) i am not a fan of the rhyming in this ...it seems a bit rudimentary .. i think the social commentary is straight forward and sharp; however i would like to see more of our poetic tools used here .. some assonance or consonance .. some personifications or metaphor .. i think this would be an excellent piece for satire .. some sarcasm maybe ... i think the plea of your speaker is passionate and sings .. theme is incredibly important and ongoing .. could use more poetic tooling ;) i personally love the resonance of your "circles" .. for those you look and listen even just a little .. they are profound and enfolding .. peace and joy
E.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Thankyou so much for your words of wisdom but you know me just plain Jane and not very experimental with different ways or words...hopefully it was understood the way it’s written..Thankyou for taking time 🌹

[Einstein Noodle]

oh the theme is strong and clear .. the passion of your speaker felt ... we owe respect to our Mother Earth .. and have failed a lot .. but there is hope as long as we have voices such as yours ...

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Kelly and Gene... also... "Respect for Mother Earth... perhaps a rebirth even before the New Year... many a tear upon Mother Earth to nourish and blush with the colors of Autumn... Love, Pat

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Kelly... I feel your pain... we are in a box of Cracker Jacks
with no Prize... but to wait and see how it untangles in the
weeds of discontent. Without resources, we cannot help...
only cast a vote... without knowing the consequences...
until the oceans meet and the sky reflects the meaning of
freedom in all it's forms.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Wishing waiting contemplating...hope you are well🌹

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Kelly... we are well... aging together... hope you are enjoying the beginning of Autumn with Mums and Pumpkins. hugs, Pat

[John Alexander McFadyen]

An interesting poem filled with word play and full of a mix of regret and anger about what we are doing to the earth with our callous disregard.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Thankyou ..yes a bit of everything 🌹

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

This is a poem full of thought and emotion.
I could clearly heard a voice decrying human wickedness, speaking out boldly the truthfulness about those event that are revolving around the human race.

Well written, Kelly.
I wish peace ever reigns.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Thankyou for your kind review and yes I wish peace was that easy .. world needs it so very much ..we can only wish 🌹

[barleygirl]

This might be one of the most straightforward msgs I've read from you & that's why I love it! (I'm not as good at reading nuanced poetry). You sound disgusted and fed up, but even with such angst fueling your msg, you still have that characteristic sweetness, a gentle flow of thoughts that represents the very harmony you say is missing. Sometimes ranting in a harsh way only raises hackles & resistance. That's why an outpouring from the heart (like this) is more likely to reach those who've been hard-hearted on this issue. I agree with you . . . I am utterly disgusted at how humans need to have so much stupid unnecessary show-offy STUFF (in a ton of wrapping mat'l) that all our s**t is overflowing into a river of misery for the planet! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Well put and you are so right...a river of misery..so very sad..Thankyou-hope you are well🌹

[wordman]

we don`t live in that world anymore

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Sadly true but if we all just gave a little more and thought about others and the world outside our own...then only the world beca better place - but sadly I think it may be too late🌹

[wordman]

you`re welcome,never to late

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹

[emmajoy]

' For the suffering Of ‘Motherkind’ .. I need you to know .. There are those who Show remorse .. And do have Love For you,, '

Your poem pours down the page as if weeping.. .. Here you turn yourself inside out; every emotion displayed about OUR Earth, its beings and their 'for crying out LOUD' needs! You have a way of hiding words within dark as dark, yet, you include answers that would inspire if folk bothered, cared, woke up - to what's going to happen if they ignore facts. What OUR Earth needs desperately is for each being to show ONE KINDNESS - however small but unselfish, to our planet, our Home, its dwellers whether conspicuous or hidden.

As you infer, we'll have nothing - absolutely nothing to write about.. cos we won't be here. Sober thoughts which you obviously understand. Thank you, Kelly.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

My heart is bleeding , hurting..people savagely killing each other destroying world nature and each other ..shame on humanity 😭

[emmajoy]

We think the same.. truly do. Hug yourself and look from the window, there are still beautiful seconds to wonder at, Kelly. x

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

There are there are ...but I wish it was easier ..lots of love for you🌹