Devastating world

I went out for a walk,

This is the world we invaded.

Heard an old man talk:

"Is this the world we created?"

People colliding,

Searching for what they need.

Their mind is guiding,

At the corner child's smoking weed.

We can't let go of this world we've started,

The helpless African child is born.

Girl on the bench broken-hearted,

A rich man sitting on his throne.

Good people not reinvigorated,

They're just too frustrated.

Everything is so complicated,

Government for money infatuated.

The bee's flying but the flower isn't pollinated,

Is this the world we created?

Yeah, this is the world we devastated!

Author's Note

Where is that damned hope in this devastating world?

Reviews

[patricia]

I feel i should respond to this poem with an effort at being positive and inspiring hope, but sometimes all i can say is...yeah i know what you mean. Especially about the caretakers being too careworn. Still i did like the realism of it all, the way it took my mind to different scenes, different places and walks of life. Puts my own troubles into perspective thats for sure. Nice write. Thanks.

[R.A. Youngblood]

Yeah, we should take a look at the real world today. Thank you very much! :D

[Aarontastic]

'Is this the world we created?' I find myself asking that same question to myself a lot. There are pretty shocking and sad things going on all around us, even in a country like the US which is supposedly wealthy I have seen homeless veterans, poor people giving to charity while wealthy ones take their dogs with them to the mall in a Gucci bag, and lots of other things that annoy me =_= I like how your poem inveighs against all that; it's full of hard feelings for a hard world.

[R.A. Youngblood]

Yep. I need to put some hard feelings for this hard way and unfair way of life. Croatia is a fucked up country first..it's always like that. Thanks dude. :D

[Johanna]

One of my favorite poems so far that I´ve read.. It was so good! Beautiful use of words and rhyme.. loved this part especally:" I went out for a walk,
This is the world we invaded.
Heard an old man talk:
"Is this the world we created?""

and also "We can't let go of this world we've started,
The helpless African child is born.
Girl on the bench broken-hearted,
A rich man sitting on his throne."

you have real talent!! Amazing job!

[R.A. Youngblood]

Thank you very much :D

[Emrick]

What a heart touching poem.
Hope is what drives most of us, without it i believe the rich will be the only people living in this world.

[R.A. Youngblood]

Thanks! :D

[Barbara Walker]

Love that last stanza, especially the line about the bee. Strong imagery in this, it's very intense. And full of truth. Great write!

[R.A. Youngblood]

Thank you very much! :D

[Chris]

Frustration can be a palpable thing sometimes... and always living on hope gets old quickly when you don't really FEEL the hope.

[R.A. Youngblood]

Indeed. Thanks.

[Chris]

Can you change your lfe?

[R.A. Youngblood]

And I came back to my old way again, hurting myself..I just don't want to live anymore, I don't have my purpose, it doesn't make any sense. Being abused again, from bullies and my family who take it all out on me. And the next day, they act like nothing happen, and ask: "Why are you sad?" Everybody's acting like I'm a monster, like there's a nine tail fox in me! Some people know to be optimistic, but I just can't! My f*****g thoughts are choking me down, my f*****g self is tearing me up! THAT'S HOW IT SIMPLY IS, AND THAT'S HOW I FEEL!

[R.A. Youngblood]

...I can't

[Chris]

quietly nods - listening...

Catch your breath Rob... you aren't bad, just hurting... at least you have a voice that is heard...here. And a talent few can match. You come by and speak anytime at all Rob... YOU are always welcome.

[Chris]

I think you just changed your life - a little bit... you were just heard... and listened to. You are worth being heard...

[R.A. Youngblood]

Yeah, I feel better a little bit. You really think so? And I'm not talking only about myself, about the world..No justice, no freedom..there is no love!

[R.A. Youngblood]

Thank you very much, Chris!

[Chris]

When more people realize they ARE worth being heard and begin to voice THEIR thoughts then the world will begin to find more strength and purpose.

[R.A. Youngblood]

I guess so.

[Renée]

Your poem says what we all ask.. it is not pretty..and you did a fantastic job of writing about it !
your author's note....I am a Christian so that is where my strength comes from...but I will tell you.... when I get down about all this world going bad... I look to nature...birds, insects...
all that is going on in the world and still...little rolly polly bugs curl up into balls, crickets chirp at night, flys still irritate us..and those bees..well they aren't pollinating because they are taking that sweet pollen back to make honey.. there is your hope..

[R.A. Youngblood]

Your nature loving is wonderful, I've never met a person like you. Well, I decided not looking the world on a realistic way, I'd rather escape into the world of fantasy and music, if you know what I mean. Because only there I can find my happiness.

[Renée]

music is great also ( :

[R.A. Youngblood]

Yeah.

[Quill~]

Your talent shines in this piece. A powerful write! This touched me so...

[R.A. Youngblood]

Thanks :D

[Quill~]

:) You're welcome.

[Leigh]

Having a greater awareness of our world allows us to see all its faults in painstaking detail I guess and your poem points that out very clearly. This world is not ours to destroy and we do need to reign it in, big time

[R.A. Youngblood]

Thank you very much :D

[Beverly Jane]

I really like this, I've been thinking of things like this much lately. This world wasn't ours to destroy, but we did. Now look at us.

[R.A. Youngblood]

Thanks! :D

[Beverly Jane]

No problem:D

[Shy Girl]

At times I wonder the exact same question as your Author's Note asks. It's a shame that hope is only visible in small windows today. The difference that small word with a world of meaning could do if thought of more often...I better not continue with that line of thought though...makes me mad. You brought to life the fact that we need more of it...thank you for the RR. :)

[R.A. Youngblood]

Yeah, that really sucks. Yeah, that's a real world and it makes me sad either. You're welcome and thank you! :D

[Shy Girl]

You're welcome. I like how alot of your pieces bring forth questions and point out happenings with our world as a whole. Not just one piece of it...I hope that made sense there...just got going today. Again thank you for your RRs you send to me :)

[R.A. Youngblood]

Yeah, it's a reality, everything. Thanks again! :D