Conventu

conventu-meeting (latin)

I was flying in the stratosphere,

At the cloud was a big field of eglantine.

But I didn't have to fly, it was dispensable,

Nobody could see me, 'cause I was invisible.

That purple roses, I was infatuated,

That beautiness could leave me infirmed.

The land was overclouded,

You can get overawed,

This is our overlord,

He can make you overjoyed.

This moments will stay deeply ineffaceable,

That moon, so inexpugnable.

The stars, inflamed, indefinite,

They're indiscernible, infinite.

How many galaxies, innumerable,

The view, so indescribable.

I wish I could see a lodestar,

I've seen it once, so bizarre.

I can see the blemish in the sky,

To see what's wrong, I'll give it a try.

Oh, the dark angel from inferno came by,

I saw his tearful eye

And said "Don't you cry!"

"But I don't want to be the dark angel." he said,

-"Yes, I can see all the tears that you have shed."

"Oh, this evil storm ahead,

He could've take someone else instead.

Maybe my sorrow came to late,

But please, I hesitate."

-"I believe you my friend,

God knows how much you have bled.

He knows to be at the biggest garden of heaven,

Well, I suppose he'll be there at seven.

Screw you Satan, the bad who molests,

With our dear lord we will coalesce.

 

 

 

Author's Note

The story is about the young man who killed himself by jumping off the bridge. But as he was falling, at the last moment he decided to live, but it was to late. He was a good man, but he had a hard life. So I am the angel in the poem who wants to help him. I think I will write a continuation. So, tell me if there's any grammar mistakes or something. :P

Reviews

[Melobldnfr]

I am in like of what you've had to say regarding the state of overawe being able to cause infirmity. It is the state of being overstimulated. Funny, because I just mentioned something to do with that in the piece I wrote and posted this morning.

I understand the piece in regards to your author's note. As for grammar, I'll have to take another look.

Much respect and thanks for sharing.

[R.A. Youngblood]

Yeah lol. It happens to me a lot. Thank you very much :D

[quixotic_rose]

Wow that's very meaningful and admirable. I thought you did a beautiful job. there are a couple of grammar mistakes, message me if you want me to help, if not that's fine too. Beautiful, respectable work

[R.A. Youngblood]

Thank you very much. Message me, I'd like to have a little help from someone. I mean, if you want to. :P

[Nick.B]

Dark and sad story....interesting how things start to sort out by themselves when there's no time to redeem yourself...great job

[R.A. Youngblood]

Thank you (:

[Fréyjä Helv..]

There's a lot going on here. I'm not sure with the choice of words in some lines. It started rough, but it begins to ease as I continue to read.

[R.A. Youngblood]

Yeah...kind of.

[Blue Ivory]

Great story. You should definitely continue it. The only mistake I can find is "He could've taken"*

[Hester Vane]

So well written. The rhyming and structure is superb. As I was reading I sensed the tone of an old moral folktale or something like that. A great job