Inside I Rot Away

Notice the title in the poem

To see this tree’s last black berry

To find my worthy adversary 

This is a world that I can’t stand

Death was never my demand.

I hate this place.

I have nothing

I have everything 

To see your walls fall

To find another piece of it all

This world has turned to sand 

Still I shouldn’t stand

I hate this place.

I have nothing.

I have everything

I let my walls fall the f**k down.

Now I’m so close to be drowned.

Sickness is just another word.

Just another foul creature

I hate this place

I have nothing 

I have everything.

I need no one

Now It’s all done.

Sad to say.

I know I'm not perfect.

Destruction caused it all

Everything is gone.

I shouldn’t be alive.

Resting in eternal sorrow

Offspring of a b***h

To proud to cry in public

A day gone by

What’s another try

A new promise broken.

Yesterday isn’t good enough

To crumble in hate

To be suppressed by my fate.

This world in total agony

Just another war, another f*****g chore.

I hate this place.

I have nothing

I have everything.

Author's Note

Honest Opinion.
What do you think and notice the title hidden in the poem

A Fallen Hero

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

"Just another war, another f*****g chore.
I hate this place."
Life can be a pain in the a*s. Better to stand back and allow the craziness to go by and wait for something good. I try to stay positive. I'm losing my memory because the Army shots of anthrax. I must do a s****y job to pay bills. But I got my kids and grand kids to keep me going forward. Sometime we must dig deep to find reason to be alive. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[E.H. Monroe]

The repetition in sing is key here. So is the paradox of haveing everything and nothing interminglde with visuals of war and unrest. Showing the Inside I rot away in bold wouldn't have been my move. I would have let the peopole see it on their own time. Makes for a poetic mystery, The idea of letting ones walls fall shows that acceptance before inevitability. Interesting piece

[Brook Hughes]

Awesome poem! I love the repitition and word choice.

[Undying Glory]

great work man! now that was a really cool way you've hidden the title of this one, sounds and looks really nice. i sure enjoyed this one a lot. if you do want my honest opinion then i was just thinking of the lines:

"I have nothing
I have everything."
to me that was a great ending, and you perhaps didn't need to repeat that in the earlier parts of this poem.
awesome work man!

[Color of the Iris]

This was my favorite write of yours... this one was created with more emotion, and made more sense the reader. Great job, 100/100.

~ Iris ~

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

This is probably your best piece in my opinion! I love the first stanza, and very tricky to hide the title with the meaning of the poem! Great job!

[Nothing Personal]

Clever with the title thing. But otherwise, a deep, dark poem. I like the repetitive nature of I have nothing, I have everything..It is a profound message. The poem's real good , the kind of territory it delves into amazing..Like it

[Jessie McRiley]

I think this is your best work.. Loved it..