Beggars

I write em like i see em

Begging in the scorching heat,

Their hands extended,

Their faces beseeching,

Asking for something to eat.

 

A young boy sleeping on the ground,

Awakens and dons his sodden rags,

Ignoring the rumblings in his stomach,

Towards the road, his feet he drags.

 

His rags are covered in filth,

His eyes swimming with tears,

He walks towards the road,

Ignoring the children’s taunting leers.

 

He approaches a car on his protesting feet,

As if in a trance,

The light turns green, the car drives off,

Without a backward glance.

 

He stands where he is,

Not caring abut his health,

Wondering about,

The secrets of wealth.

 

Calling it a day,

On the pavement he lies,

Hoping that,

He dies, dies, dies.     

Author's Note

Revise the second last stanza someone.

Reviews

[deeps]

I like this it has truth in it. I can also feel the emotions in it.
Very nicely written.

[Call Me Blu]

his most definitley paints a picture, however compared to your other poems this is less forceful with the emotion. It is still a good poem but this was more image than emotion, loved it all the same!

[stellasautelle]

very good :)

[Kayleen]

this is great. it really paints the picture for you. i like the way it flowed and the feel of it. very sad

[Briana Collins]

I love this so much.DONT CHANGE A THING.It is a masterpiece :)

[LostInThis]

I really like this.. it gets the point of poverty in a harsh, emotional, and honest way. It strikes the heart with the pain and suffering.
It's well written, with a steady beat.
Good job. :)

and since you asked here is
My revision of the second to last stanza:
He stays where he is
without an ounce of health
He'll never know
the secrets of wealth

[D S Rollins]

Wow. I love the tone and pace. The first two stanza's create so much imagery for me.. and I love the flowing of the words.

[Autumn]

This is a very emotional poem. I especially feel it in the last stanza. I like it alot. Very good. :]