Unsaid

Unsaid

A Poem by Farhan Shaikh

Saw no beautiful sight
Until I saw you,
Within the beautiful blue
I let my heart sink into.
I never walked before
In this shoes,
Yet I am taking myself
Without you.
Wishing to see you here
Again so soon
Was stuck for a star
But I found the moon.
Glimpse of yours
Makes my heart to misbehave
Being not around you feels like
An ocean without waves.
As the soot in your eyes
In mine forever you lies…

© 2018 Farhan Shaikh


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Sometimes what we thought we see and saw just isnt so- then its time to try let go- not easy when we see the beauty but they dont see to be it themselves- sometimes were a lesson for them to be taught but at a price its bought- great words🌹

Posted 9 Months Ago


Wonderful and generous words for love
"Glimpse of yours
Makes my heart to misbehave."
I do like the above lines. When the heart misbehave. Can find wonder and a miracle. Thank you Farhan for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote




Posted 10 Months Ago


Dang, Farhan! This poem was very well written and it captures the string feelings you, or the narrator, have for the woman of your dreams. Definitely made my heart melt a bit and I hope one day you use this poem to tell your special someone what you truly feel. Beautiful.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Farhan Shaikh

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much 😄
Very nice and pleasing poem I like the way you write this keep writing (((smiles))) 😊😊😊😊😊

Posted 11 Months Ago


Farhan Shaikh

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much 😄
Taniska  😊😊

11 Months Ago

Your most welcome 😄😄😄
You sure know how to make a person melt... This is so beautiful, feels so angelic, so pure... And so true. Wow! It is really addicting too, as you want to read it again and again. Keep writing!

Posted 11 Months Ago


Farhan Shaikh

11 Months Ago

Thanks so much
Anjali

11 Months Ago

You're welcome!
Farhan,
Now rustle up the courage to send to the special lady and let her swoon for you! Your words betray your feelings and thats what moves the poets pen. I am fond of the line "Makes my heart to misbehave. That is good stuff. Well done young man.
Blessings,
Richie b.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Farhan Shaikh

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much
With the exception of a couple of grammatical and poetical errors, this is an amazing poem. It has relatively good flow and some of the juiciest lines you've ever written. THIS is going places. It simply needs some tweaking in order to reach perfection. ¡Maravilloso! Well done!

Posted 11 Months Ago


Farhan Shaikh

11 Months Ago

May i ask the poetical mistakes, so i can improve!!
emipoemi

11 Months Ago

Reading it again, I don't remember why I even said "poetical", but there are def grammatical odditie.. read more
Farhan Shaikh

11 Months Ago

They are a lot helpful
This feels like a tangle of metaphors . . . blue, shoe, star, moon, ocean, soot . . . you've done a good job of using imaginative ideas to compare this unspoken love to various things in life & your descriptions feel full of passion. When using more than one metaphor, it's good to try to pick from a similar theme, like heavenly bodies, sun, moon and sky, etc. I'm not a fan of scrambling metaphors from different ideas, but you've done a good job of tying everything together into an original-sounding love plea of longing (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 11 Months Ago


Farhan Shaikh

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much
beautiful words of love,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,

Posted 11 Months Ago


Farhan Shaikh

11 Months Ago

Thank you mr. Wordman
 wordman

11 Months Ago

you`re welcome
'Makes my heart to misbehave'
I am smiling reading this interesting line. It feels so good to read from you after a very long time.
Very pleasing poem, it will definitely steal the heart of the one whom have written this for 😀
The last line,I feel does not suit the above line. It clearly looks that you have used the word 'lies' for rhyming forcefully.
'As the soot in your eyes' this left me in confusion.
Was she not good that you choose the word soot to decribe her eyes or you meant to say that her eyes are black and that is why you used the word soot?


Posted 11 Months Ago


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Added on November 2, 2018
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Farhan Shaikh
Farhan Shaikh

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