"Original Title"

"Original Title"

A Poem by FarisGreybear
"

4/3/2014, KY USA

"

A piece of paper tells me that I own a square of dirt.
Deed in my name, with forest and field, horse and bridle.
Grandfather tilled this land, farmed till it hurt.
Its said with the crown of England rests the original title


Injected children sent to barbed wire enclosed blockpens.
Rightful owners in rooms on long halls, like nursing homes.
Still the paper says its mine, so I set my posts and fence.
Despite four strands, trails stay true where the deer roams.


Neglected elders left on fluorescent lit tiles of silence,
To the heirs and assigns passes what was once thine.
Yet still the babes are kept off their land, stolen by violence.
Blacktop and dynamite, smoke thick blocking sunshine.


And that recorded instrument still conveys my title, oh yes.
So still stolen easily, eminently, inevitably, never in my grasp.
And the soil awaits, despite deeded estate, best confess.
At last the land, the kids recover and discover, after my last gasp.


To the children's children shall always be the land's original title.

© 2015 FarisGreybear


My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Featured Review

I don't think the numbered lines do anything to enhance he poem, in fact they detract from your message.

Ownership of land is as old as the hills, why should one man about a lifetime and someone else move in and take it over. If a man builds a mill by a river why should other people eject him from his ownership of said mill, so ownership is logical and valid mark of a society. Title deeds and law are essential to a modern society, the other side of the coin is just anarchy tat could not support 300 million Americans.

The demise of the indigenous population and the demotion of them to a lower status is necessary from the conquerors point of view. No one likes change and change is painful to the vanquished. We could add cruel and deadly, but the alternative is to let three million people rule a huge continent that supports 300 million and could possible support one billion.

I take the sadness of your poem reflecting the point of view of those who lost their land and the beauty of the wilderness as it once was. The fact that we cannot go back does not alter the sadness felt by the original owners, by that I mean the ones who first occupied it from Mongolia with the dark skins and the asiatic features.

Your poem is the cry of all peoples vanquished and demoted, moved from their land. I think at this time of the Crimeans, the Jews of Poland and Russia, the Palestinians, the Welsh of Greater Britain, the Bretons in France, the Fins from their northern territories by Russia, and now the Ukrainians invaded by foreign invaders Russians calling themselves settlers.

Yes, a valid poem reflecting a deep seated sadness of the demise of a people and the loss of the land and rights to overwhelming events. There is not much to be done other than to alleviate their plight and honour the legal agreements made with the American government at that time. The lament should be heard and recorded, which is what you have done with this moving work.


Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frank

4 Years Ago

The only way forward for long term survival of the planet, in my opinion, is to limited families to .. read more
FarisGreybear

4 Years Ago

before the cherokee nation of oklahoma managed to wrestle control of the local indian hospitals from.. read more
Frank

4 Years Ago

Well, tribes like that must be allowed to grow back again. But I was thinking of a voluntary code to.. read more



Reviews

I don't think the numbered lines do anything to enhance he poem, in fact they detract from your message.

Ownership of land is as old as the hills, why should one man about a lifetime and someone else move in and take it over. If a man builds a mill by a river why should other people eject him from his ownership of said mill, so ownership is logical and valid mark of a society. Title deeds and law are essential to a modern society, the other side of the coin is just anarchy tat could not support 300 million Americans.

The demise of the indigenous population and the demotion of them to a lower status is necessary from the conquerors point of view. No one likes change and change is painful to the vanquished. We could add cruel and deadly, but the alternative is to let three million people rule a huge continent that supports 300 million and could possible support one billion.

I take the sadness of your poem reflecting the point of view of those who lost their land and the beauty of the wilderness as it once was. The fact that we cannot go back does not alter the sadness felt by the original owners, by that I mean the ones who first occupied it from Mongolia with the dark skins and the asiatic features.

Your poem is the cry of all peoples vanquished and demoted, moved from their land. I think at this time of the Crimeans, the Jews of Poland and Russia, the Palestinians, the Welsh of Greater Britain, the Bretons in France, the Fins from their northern territories by Russia, and now the Ukrainians invaded by foreign invaders Russians calling themselves settlers.

Yes, a valid poem reflecting a deep seated sadness of the demise of a people and the loss of the land and rights to overwhelming events. There is not much to be done other than to alleviate their plight and honour the legal agreements made with the American government at that time. The lament should be heard and recorded, which is what you have done with this moving work.


Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frank

4 Years Ago

The only way forward for long term survival of the planet, in my opinion, is to limited families to .. read more
FarisGreybear

4 Years Ago

before the cherokee nation of oklahoma managed to wrestle control of the local indian hospitals from.. read more
Frank

4 Years Ago

Well, tribes like that must be allowed to grow back again. But I was thinking of a voluntary code to.. read more

Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

165 Views
1 Review
Added on February 28, 2015
Last Updated on February 28, 2015

Author

FarisGreybear
FarisGreybear

Raceland, KY



About
former kentucky land surveyor. ancient cherokee living in modern appalachia more..

Writing