Seems Like I Want To Die

"Life at some point seems so meaningless, even if U have everything. It just feels that way"

Seems Like I Want To Die

I found darkness in the light,

what I'm most afraid of, is the happiness' height

Since things seems to change very quick

Happiness followed by sadness, so sick

Life too has mood swings,

sometimes happiness, other times sadness it brings

At some point life seems so meaningless

Not a thing is constant, life is an immense guess

In our veins darkness spread,

we swallow our dreams like a piece of bread

Life seems so unfair,

it get us in trouble, yet no one to care

For their own purpose everyone is here,

no one is yours, I swear

At some point, they'll leave you

No one can bear it in your shoe

I can breathe, I can feel

But broken heart can never be healed

Even if for life I try,

life appears so unfair, seems like I just want to die

Author's Note

This is just a DARK piece I wrote. Some random feelings. Hope U'll enjoy!

Reviews

[Angela Sparks]

I love this piece:) one does tend to find themselves in between the light and the dark. Life making it seem as though no side is quite right. Stuck on the fence, and soon one starts titling over to the dark side and is lost in the feelings of suicide. I loved the dark tone to it. The feelings you gave made me. Shiver. ^.^ an AMAZING poem. Every forward and truthful

[Destiny Dreamer]

Yeah you are absolutely right.
I am very GLAD you liked it.
Your review means A lot to me :)
Thanks once AGAIN :*:*:* (XOXO)

[Angela Sparks]

No problem ^.^ thank you for writing!

[Arjun Singh]

Woah.... wanna die at 15?....lol
As a poet, a nice piece, nd u deserve appreciation....
Keep dreaming!!
:)

[Destiny Dreamer]

Haha :D I can't say it isn't personal... 'Cause I don't write with hands but heart! And Writer shouldn't be afraid of hiding what they feel. So THANK YOU for reviewing! :) THANKS A LOT!

[Kousika]

"For their own purpose everyone is here,
no one is yours, I swear
At some point, they'll leave you
No one can bear it in your shoe

I can breathe, I can feel
But broken heart can never be healed
Even if for life I try,
life appears so unfair, seems like I just want to die "


Told the eternal raw truth of life.. Though each care for the other no one is going to accompany us till the end. This struggle makes us learn many things.. Great work again friend.. :)))

[Destiny Dreamer]

Thanks A lot Cutie :* Glad U noticed it. Thanks for the encouraging words!

[AaronFreitas]

I really like this piece Dreamer :) Awesome write and I love the dark piece :) Keep it up

[Destiny Dreamer]

Same here ;) Thanks A lot Aaron ^_^

[Buddhistboy73]

Like the dark undertones of futility of the human condition you have penned here. Yes, indeed life does seem like it's not worth living at times for all of us I guess. But for me there are also some moments of hope in this piece....."I can breathe, I can feel"........"Not a thing is constant".....
so for me this represents a call for hope from within the darkness...:)
BB

[Destiny Dreamer]

Oh that's GOOD! I like Ur thinking even in dark piece U found HOPE! Impressive :)))
Thanks A lot for reading!
I really appreciate it! ^_^

[Amber Lily]

Ah yes, the struggle between embracing the feelings of light and dark. There cannot be one without the other, a life of too much light can be blinding, and a life of too much dark can be cold. Find your balance, and you'll be able to make it through each day easier, great work :)

[Destiny Dreamer]

Yup Absolutely Amber! Thanks A lot CUTIE for Ur amazing review!!

[Irenic]

your poem is vivid, good try and especially

I can breathe, I can feel
But broken heart can never be healed
Even if for life I try,
life appears so unfair, seems like I just want to die

These lines are

[Destiny Dreamer]

Thanks A lot Irenic ^_^ I am really glad U liked it!

[Irenic]

Welcome...........................................:)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Loved your overcast poetry..
Rhyming is awesome.. From the very first stanza the poem gives an overtone of unfair life..
"In our veins darkness spread,
we swallow our dreams like a piece of bread" fav lines.
Enjoyed it!

[Destiny Dreamer]

I really appreciate Ur Review. It means A lot to me. Thanks A lot Jyoti ^_^

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are welcome..!

[Rajat malik]

Once again you wrote it while giving a lesson......
And of course the rhyming is just superb.....
It's sad to know ther bitter truth of life but Reaklity is reality and you have shown it nicely......

[Destiny Dreamer]

It is very NICE of you! Thanks A lot :)

[Rajat malik]

you are welcome without any doubt

[Coyote Poetry]

Honest and direct words in the words.
"I can breathe, I can feel
But broken heart can never be healed
Even if for life I try,
life appears so unfair, seems like I just want to die"
Heartache do heal. Old Grandpa advice. "Only way to forget a heartbreak. Find a new and better love." A powerful poem. Made me think tonight. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Destiny Dreamer]

Yup U are RIGHT. Hearts do heal but they are never the same :// And THANKS A LOT for Ur SUPER KIND REVIEW ^_^ Thanks Again!

[Coyote Poetry]

My pleasure to read your work and you are welcome.