Paradise

Paradise

A Poem by Marisa

Timid, delicate strings build, sending a rush through my bloodstream as they ascend to a joyful swirl.

I feel my chest rise and fall, as I breathe in, and sweetly sigh out, each note.

Eyes closed, a soft smile lightly sweeps across my face.

Whispered hints of hope and romance are revealed as her story unfolds.

Tears of overwhelming beauty smile down my cheeks as I'm lost in her vast, whimsical layers. 

© 2013 Marisa


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' Eyes closed, a soft smile lightly sweeps across my face. ' What a sublime feeling ..

Music is a real Lorelie, can lure a body into the most wonderful places and when calm and gently lilting, there's a moment when you feel as if you're very much alive yet surrounded by the most sublime calm. That's what your poem suggests and so beautifully, 'Tears of overwhelming beauty smile down my cheeks as I'm lost in her vast, whimsical layers.'

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Tears of overwhelming beauty smile down my cheeks as I'm lost in her vast, whimsical layers.
interesting and splendid read,,, good work my friend

Posted 10 Years Ago


It warms me, I feel the feelings and I love the piece. I believe you can make it even more powerful by leaving off or changing he last three words.
sweet,
Alex
PS: I don't rate people in points so any score that shows is not from me it's the default setting.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

' Eyes closed, a soft smile lightly sweeps across my face. ' What a sublime feeling ..

Music is a real Lorelie, can lure a body into the most wonderful places and when calm and gently lilting, there's a moment when you feel as if you're very much alive yet surrounded by the most sublime calm. That's what your poem suggests and so beautifully, 'Tears of overwhelming beauty smile down my cheeks as I'm lost in her vast, whimsical layers.'

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful depiction of your connection to a piece of music - auditory poetry. Nice!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is so gentle and beautiful and so well written!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Reminds me of music as well,
Enjoyed

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this has been my relationship with music my whole life...listening, singing along and dancing to the beat and the lyrics...

lovely piece.

jacob

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

When I read this I think of music.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Feels like the beginning of a beautiful relationship. Nicely done.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sometimes when two souls meet, they truly touch. sometimes, if they are very lucky and the time is right...they are soulmates finding each other. so...this is how this write speaks to me....well done!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on April 25, 2013
Last Updated on April 25, 2013
Tags: Music, Emotion, Poetry, Violin, Strings, Notes, Paradise

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Marisa
Marisa

Ocean Grove, NJ



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