Nameless.

Nameless.

A Story by Fatima
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The deeper the pain the deeper she felt the need to die

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	Why eat if she's just gonna throw it up? Why sleep if she has no dreams?  She already past the point of being defined as an addict, past the point of some what sane.  But who's the one to blame? The man who took her innocence at a young age?  Or the boy who called her fat day after day? She has no family, unless you count the men she often thinks she knows. No home, unless you count the toilette where she throws up everything but her memories. No friends unless you call the blade to her bare skin. I know what you're thinking, why doesn't she just take her life? End the on going pain? Well, she's tried and tried but hell, looks like she couldn't even do that right. 

© 2015 Fatima


Author's Note

Fatima
First draft and kinda just wrote down everything that was on my mind.

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You can evoke emotion pretty well. And, as stated before, you have a relatable way of putting things. Uhh, could just be me, but the use of the phrase "throw up" twice is kinda redundant. I would mix it up. Get more creative with it. But that's just a suggestion. Also the sentence "No friends unless you call the blade to her bare skin" doesn't really sit quite right with me. I dunno, it just doesn't sound like you completed the thought. But again, just a suggestion. And maybe some more imagery on the suicide attempts. Okay, I'm gonna quit trying to dictate your writing now lol. ;P

Posted 9 Years Ago


Fatima

9 Years Ago

I'll keep that in mind, thank you!
Wow.... that ending was very intense! I loved it!!! So much sadness and despair, it made me feel for her, great job!

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Really, really sad. But it's also touching. Even though this is shot, this is mind blowing. The truth is I often think of suicide, but there's a part of me that's not willing to give up. My pain is different then yours, but suicide is often in my mind. Yet I shake my head clear and just write in my own world. You should never, ever give up, even though you feel like the hard times won't stop. They will.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Fatima

9 Years Ago

Oh no, I think you got the wrong idea, I'm not experiencing this i'm just writing from the outside. .. read more
Wow, I don't know what to say... I''ve been around with several people and have had friends who feel all but just like this. You made the story brief but you really hit it home with what you're conveying and managed to make the reader feel so much emotion in such little time. An amazing work to say the least, incredibly touching.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Fatima

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much Alec!

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Added on November 21, 2014
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