Eyeing.

 

 

Eyeing.

 

A fish,
like translucent shadow 
slowly shows silver through dimly

low-lit submarine green.

 

A gill
like laced edge of poncho,    
rising to roll a lake's morning face

steadily sways to breathe.

 

A skin,
of thinnest divide knows
it is separated from my airy flesh

solely by liquid need.

 

A fin,
touched by finger coated        
in bubbles for closer contact slips

to more safety beneath.

 

A flip,
and fish dives fast below  
in mist churned by interference

'tho glassily eyeing me.

Reviews

[Ken Simm.]

Very Zen for me this. And much appreciated for it.

[Fay Slimm]

And grateful dear Ken for your dropping by and for the review of Eyeing...........

[Neville]

we got a choice to make now.. dont we.. is this a single specimen poem or a whole shoal ... after peering through so many reeds, I'm blowed if I can make up my mind .. but at the end of the day, it really doesn't matter which way ya look at them/it .. there are no red herrings here :)

[Fay Slimm]

Only a one-off sorry dear friend - contact with that fish left its mark on my memory and will probably never happen again - your review makes me wonder though if I should search out me trusty ol' ticklin' stick agen..................x

[Neville]

then it is a fine specimen and true.. I'm all for catch n release these days... x

[Cory Barrett]

Its like i'm there. But always on the other side of the glass

[Fay Slimm]

On the other side of the glass is the best place to be for us with human lungs Cory - thank you loads for your review.

[barleygirl]

Thanks to Einstein Noodle (Gene) for read requesting me on your excellent poem that I would've hated to miss. I love this poem on many levels. First, it's just plain excellent detailed observation of real life & then transcribed into interesting word paintings. Second, I'm reminded of how this could be something other than the fish, something other than the water, like possibly the veil that separates the living from the dead. But most of all, I'm just thinking this could be the way life itself seems so elusive & so ever-changing depending on the angle & the light at which we view it. This is brilliant on many levels! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Fay Slimm]

You doubly honour my work dear Margie -- so so pleased you saw in my few words other depths of meaning............. bless ya for saying so and loads of huggles......... warmly from Fay

[Coyote Poetry]

Very nice use of description. You allowed the reader to see your words. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Fay Slimm]

My pleasure always is to share intimate meetings with nature and its wonders dear friend.

[Ana Papaya]

Gorgeous imagery in this beautiful poem.

[Fay Slimm]

So so pleased you enjoyed the read of a meetings with a little fish Ana - - the more we poets look the more we can see. .................

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Fay... years ago, we fished on the side of a mountain
where Rainbow Trout were easily caught. I had a large Net with
a handle and when we caught the Trout and placed it in the Net...
it swished and struggled and slowly lost its Colour.
It was put on Ice for the drive home. I will never forget the
Exquisite Beauty of the Rainbow Trout, and how I felt so badly
to disturb the gift of Nature. gently, Pat

[Fay Slimm]

I understand completely Pat - we too feel the pull to take up the saying - Live and Let Live that has long been the vegetarian motto around here - -- for an experience with the wonderful life in nature gives us much food for thought - - my thank yous for dropping by and for your perceptive review. warm hugs .............. Fay

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my goodness Fay! i think this is exquisite .. if ever the sense of haiku could be expanded and translated to human touch this is it .. i loved reading and experiencing every drop of "Eyeing" .. the pic a perfect compliment and vis versa ... which came first? the pic or the poem? just curious ;) V3 is killer for me .. stunning imagery throughout .. drew me in and held me there .. felt a bit of the splash of water as the fish turns and flips that tail ... well done! thanks so much for sharing .. i can't believe more people have not found this one yet ..

[Fay Slimm]

Thanking you immensely for this very kind review - I am so pleased you enjoyed reading words that came after the picture was taken to describe the feeling of delight I had when stroking that fish for but a moment.......grateful for your interest.

[Einstein Noodle]

wow! you took the pic .. that's your hand! makes it even more special .. i live in the Ozark Mts. and we had an armadillo pass through our front yard a couple years ago. They are very hard of hearing and have poor eyesight but incredible sense of smell ... i was able to walk up to it and put my hand out and it put its little pink snout up to sniff ... i scratched its armor plated back which caused it to jump straight up ..scared the heck out of me :))))) i read up on them a bit and that is their startle response .. ;) beautiful pic Fay you have an eye for it ... and again .. love this poem!

[Fay Slimm]

Ah - - I did not take the pic. but a special and trained photographer caught the image and its reflection and doctored it expertly - but the moment of contact will stay with me as it has with you and the armadillo - bless you for sharing the feeling of pleasure and excitement it gave and which has remained - - I one day stroked a dolphin who was trailing us into harbour and the contact was electrifying - eye to eye for quite a time was breathtaking - and that skin-stroking was I believe delighting us both..............

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my goodness .. a dolphin!! magical no doubt! :) blessing galore on ya friend!

[barleygirl]

Thanks for read-requesting me on this poem, Gene, becuz it's not to be missed! *smile*

[Einstein Noodle]

i agree :)