Unreal.

 

 

Unreal.

 

Shadowy movements of ethereal
music play nebulous games
with light's lacy fingers, weaving
watery lines on sleepy lake.

Tonight diaphanous curl of filmy
grey smoke whispers its
          liquid journey along growing dim           
with fervent limpidity.

Time holds breath as stars stack
essence of tiffany dew
on blackening trout's shiny back
in twilight's translucence.

Mist covers sky but above hangs
the gauzy sickle-shaped
glow of shade-blinkered lantern
trying to flicker again.

Clouds part and dome entrances
as the beautiful ghost
of a fading rainbow dances its last 
and night closes the show.       

 

Reviews

[Poetic Beauty]

The description of a cloudy sky is amazing. It allowed me to picture the scene within my mind clearly. Then the departure of the clouds allows the stars to shine through gleaming with all their beauty.

[Fay Slimm]

Thank you indeed for your generous review of Unreal - am so pleased you enjoyed the read

[Poetic Beauty]

You are welcome. It is a cloudy cold dreary day here

[Neville]

... and what a way to go eh' Fay .. your words stack up so beautifully .. an eloquent gentleness .. 'Unreal' indeed :)

[Fay Slimm]

Merci beaucoup mon ami - - so so glad you enjoyed reading my take on Unreal.............x

[Neville]

Tis true .. he did indeed .............. x

[emmajoy]

'.. a fading rainbow dances its last - and night closes the show. '

Four dramatic stanzas laid with rich vocabulary and scenes set exquisitely, Fay. But then you finish with such delicate and subtle phrasing, I sat back, sighing, calm, lips needing to smile.

Beautiful.

[Fay Slimm]

Your enjoyment of Unreal gives me delight dear emma - am so pleased you liked the formula and thank you for this generous review.