Intertwined.

Just testing my creative skills.

"Intertwined" By Fabian Franco

I step right in.

You step right out.

Reversing the moments.

That make us alive.

Nothing more to be done.

But so much more to be said.

Push and pull everything around.

Circulation through your lungs.

Blood pumping to your heart.

Knowledge growing in your mind.

Always looking for more.

Never stopping to make sure.

I never really understood.

What is there that goes good.

Is there anything that makes sense.

Is there anything that is conscience.

Flowing through right to the mind.

Giving back to the confined.

See the plainness in my eyes.

Hear the pulse in my wrist.

Feel the beat in my heart.

Taste the blood in my veins.

Author's Note

Wrote this in a period of 3 days.

Reviews

[Sukriti Suki]

This left me feeling wanting for more...as if something is left unsaid.

[joe shmo]

Nice poem! Keep writing Practice makes perfect!

[Miss Coral]

Great job at pacing yourself- three days? I rarely am able to focus on one poem for more than 10 minutes, haha.

The rhythm could use some work, but overall, I liked this piece. The last stanza especially.
Nice job. c:

-Coral-

[brianna vega]

great choice of words i never take time on my stuff
i appreciate people who do
it always sounds better
and means more most the time haha

[Ruth]

I admire your talent for creating a questioning poem whatever the subject love :)
Really great work!
A blast of wandering the walls of the body within the consciousness, this is one of my fav's so far lol
xx

[loowzerX]

Cool stuff :)