Burn

Burn

A Poem by Justin Miller

This is not my home
This is a house built on hurt
Materialistic walls made of wood
and built to burn
We tear, we rip, and we break
You spill the words of a liar
You gave me the matches
to strike our fire
If this Is the life we live
These four walls that keep me here
are nothing more
than my worst fears
I can't do this anymore
And if this life is worth living
then I need to know
that there can be difference
The house is on fire
But my home has been ashes
It's burning bright
To rid me of the memory as it passes

© 2015 Justin Miller


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Good rhyme scheme, nice flow, good wording. Over all good job, however there is room to better improve this piece. Different phrasing and stronger wording would make this a true masterpiece. As it stands now though, its a vivid and raw yet thoroughly enjoyable piece. Good show.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Justin Miller

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much. I wrote this fairly quickly just to see how the website worked. Wished I would ha.. read more
This is beautifully sad...

Posted 4 Years Ago


Justin Miller

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much
Great job using vivid words to capture the strong emotion behind the text! I really enjoyed reading this! :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Justin Miller

4 Years Ago

Thanks a lot. I will be sure to look at your writings
Broken homes are something I can relate to. Thankyou for putting into words what I have not yet been able to bring myself to do.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Justin Miller

4 Years Ago

Thanks man. I'll put some more up sometime. I just created this account last night and wrote that in.. read more
Eliot Knight

4 Years Ago

Looking forward to it :)

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Added on July 27, 2015
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Justin Miller
Justin Miller

Dallas, TX



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