My Poem To You

My Poem To You

A Poem by Firebird

I sit in the corner with tears streaming down my face,

Wondering how I had come upon this strange place.

I look at your pictures and a single thought crosses my mind,

Did you ever truly love me like you had said so many times?

I wondered why you had left me here to fall apart,

You had no idea that you now held my heart.

I thought about how we used to play those silly games,

Now there just my memories sitting in broken frames.

You said I deserved someone better than you,

You said I needed someone who could make my dreams come true.

Now I try to move on with a guy from my class,

But my heart is still broken like the picture frames glass.

This poems just to say how much I truly cared,

I only wanted you to be the guy that was there.

Your the only man I want by my side,

Your the only man whom I can always confide.

I love you and I just wanted you to know,

I love you more than words could ever show.

Your the only man for me and I will always love you,

Because your the only man whom I could ever be true.

© 2008 Firebird


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Second stanza: misspelled 'place'
Third stanza: misspelled 'your'

Essentially its a good poem, and obviously as a writer you have potential if you worked on rhythm. You have a great rhythm that shows up but its like your squander it while you try to make things rhyme. Don't worry about rhyming. Otherwise, great job.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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i love the pyshical imagery but i would have seperated them into stanzas

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The person you love goes and breaks your heart...you've done a great job of showing the feeling of heartbreak here. It is consuming and never-ending. Thank you for the read, you've dne a great job on this poem.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like it a lot. I can feel the emotion behind it. I like it

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Second stanza: misspelled 'place'
Third stanza: misspelled 'your'

Essentially its a good poem, and obviously as a writer you have potential if you worked on rhythm. You have a great rhythm that shows up but its like your squander it while you try to make things rhyme. Don't worry about rhyming. Otherwise, great job.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Firebird
Firebird

Scottsville, KY



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