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Comprocomprise

A Poem by Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

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I dreamt of you alongside me

At dawn on courtyard pew

We took the view down canopy

Beneath some windswept yew

Stirring our brews sweet amity

We drink the mourning dew

Sipping surrenders sanctity

Beliefs we once held true

Kissing the lips epiphany

there lies a me and you


© 2019 Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)


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Love your imaginative "poetic-license" title! : )
Along with your well presented display, it brings to mind a loving couple who is comprised on/by compromise … aren't most all meaningful, enduring relationships?
This (to me) has a wispy kind of romantic appeal about it, that invites the reader into your moment to enjoy the increasingly warm imagery … a poem to dance upon the heart.
On the techy side: Your excellently rendered a,b rhyme scheme, in 8/6/8/6 Ballad meter makes for a smoothly captivating, waltzing beat … quite lovely, indeed. Only critique would be the L4 off-rhyme, which can be easily sorted by, "Beneath those windswept yew" (expressing more than one yew, as in a line of yew), or some-such, to match the other b rhymes.
Your picture choices are always compelling, as is your charming syntax (in places) uniquely You.

I'm enjoying your work more and more, with each read.
Thank you, My Fine Friend, for sharing your original efforts! ⁓ Richard 🍃

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

4 Months Ago

Thanks for the 411 … very interesting.
Sadly, while pruning our yew, one of my dogs chewed.. read more
Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

4 Months Ago

Oh that’s horrible about your dog so sorry to hear
Richard 🍃

4 Months Ago

Yes, Robert,
Sadder, too, is that he was a near death golden retriever stray I'd nursed back .. read more



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This decastich is a product of a beautiful imaginary thought; Well writing, well constructed, well passed and reality endowed.
Nice piece.

Posted 3 Months Ago


an interesting poem, one that i could mostly understand.
just wondering, the line "We drink the mourning dew" is that a typo for 'morning' 'cos why would you be mourning when with a friend ?

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

3 Months Ago

I cant help myself i play with words and meanings its both morning or dawn of an understanding and m.. read more
Carola

3 Months Ago

that's interesting, that never occurred to me.
but do we loose ? an older knowledge being su.. read more
Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

3 Months Ago

well its sorta like when you live with a given define that you hold to yourself to be a part of who .. read more
part poet, part prosateur. It's beautiful and warm like a discussion between lovers. like a renaissance painting with images suspended between medieval and modern motifs. To "drink the morning dew" is a sentiment about the power of rememberability. It pushes aside the forgettable in a surge of reason; in an urge of reminiscence. Very beautifully written...dana

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

4 Months Ago

You see so much when you read me Dana... it is always nice to see what you see I love to play with w.. read more
I like your play with words, BB. Your title tells me that you seek ways to say things when available words don't quite make it all the way there. I've found myself doing this too, and that's one of my favorite things about poetry-- that flexibility of language and the way it can stretch an idea to help us reach what we're after.

I have recently began to work on my genealogy and discovered that the town I live in was largely settled by distant relatives of mine a couple of centuries ago. Most of my life I felt like there was a dark tunnel between my lifetime and the 'family tree' of my past because I knew nothing and as such there's a feeling like it is possible to spring forth from nothing. That sounds weird. Anyway, I found a nearby graveyard that had many of my relatives, and my children and I (last week) walked a couple of miles to explore it and try to --I don't know-- absorb some of that history.

I suppose it doesn't make sense for me to talk about all that on your poem, but, your poem reminded me of that space. The stillness of an empty (of living souls) graveyard where there are halls and halls of stories that (after an elapse of time) are largely forgotten. But the spirit of it all remains. The spirit of our experience and those that were intertwined with it.

There's a sense of two people here, but at the same time, a sense like the words are for oneself. A reaching toward understanding. And the stillness/sadness of time having got away.

I always enjoy my forays into your work. There's a mystery that I appreciate encountering.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

4 Months Ago

wow that is amazing! I hope you took some good pictures for sketching what an awesome adventure. Thi.. read more
Such sensual metaphysical writing. Top class!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

4 Months Ago

Is that your given name or your pen name? Doesn’t matter I like it just the same. I had a friend o.. read more
Aurora

4 Months Ago

Aurora is my pen name as it reminds me of the Aurora Borealis and tells me to keep shining. ;)
Compromise can be a tricky travelling companion at times... mainly cos there can be one who can't spell the word! That said, sharing a good and simple thesaurus, almost anything can be achieved! Your words are a sure route to how it can be, the meld of a hugger.mugger of angles and the serpentine. Discovering, '.. We drink the mourning dew - Sipping surrenders sanctity .. '

Does the graphic intend the larger than life and intention or... the shadow of the man when leading a convoluted way ?

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

4 Months Ago

For years I have tried and failed to capture an image of my shadow that melded into the the objects .. read more
emmajoy

4 Months Ago

Reading a person's work is a privilege, so, I like to try to understand the content as well as appre.. read more
Though I believe You are speaking of Your shadow as I can get from Your photo, still this brings so much comfort, ease and peace to the senses, it's calm and smooth, like a soft breeze and have the taste of a lovely daydream, feels like "whole" when You are blissfully "whole" connected and bonded to Your higher self, the two now are one. This is You dear Bunny, this poem is You and so much like You, resonates what it is "You". wonderful dreamy read.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

4 Months Ago

I am gobsmacked... to be seen and heard and referred to in such a manner is absolutely wonderful I a.. read more
Your artistry is fine tuned in this piece, Bunny. You rhyme beautifully!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

4 Months Ago

Hi Kelly :) nice to see you! Thank you so much me thinks I’m starting to get the hang of this poet.. read more

Very creative and such
beautiful words 😊



We drink the mourning dew

Sipping surrenders sanctity

Beliefs we once held true

Kissing the lips epiphany



there lies a me and you




Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

4 Months Ago

thanks Benita glad to meet you I followed a read thread from Margie and happened upon your poem I'm .. read more
sweet poem with lovely imagery and thoughts
composed so beautifully

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

4 Months Ago

Hey Hey Edie nice to meet you :) thank you for the kind words and read.

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Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)
Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

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Hello My Name is Robert Trakofler My nickname is Bad Bunny... I am the Bunny but the bunny isn't me long live the bunny I own an art gallery and performance space in Pittsburgh called The Zeni.. more..

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