Dressing

Dressing

A Poem by Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)
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4 words and 7 definitions experiment

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__Dressing__

 

Dawning creased smile dread

Clutch crush cling captured

 

Donning mean vile threads

Crush captured clutch clings

 

Haunting dreams rile shreds

Clinging crush captures clutches

 

Flaunting seems guile stead

Capture clutches clings crush

 

Wanting schemes trial dead

Capture clutch cling crushed

 

Pawn pedophiles spread

Captured crushing clings clutch

 

Spawn wings exile treads

Crush clutches capture clings





© 2019 Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)


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I hear haunting music as I read this poem, maybe something harsh from a true horror story. I feel a violence here, an inescapable drum beat of terror and maybe death. I see a perpetrator violating the most innocent, defenseless, then shamed victim, back turned. I see not pretty dressing, but something one might use to wrap a mortal wound.

I might have missed the intent, but that's what I read. A masterfully written poem that captures the essence of man's wickedness.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

7 Months Ago

thank you thank you thank you Yes Its about window dressing and a family that lived with sexual abus.. read more



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I cannot follow what you say about 4 words & 7 definitions, but I was hyper-tuned-in to your word play with word sounds . . . the lines with 4 words struck me as a funereal dirge, a chant . . . I thought of how often people dress in a trend/norm or a uniform that completely kills the spirit that might come across if this person was dressing to please his/her true nature. I would venture to say that 95% of what a person is all about can be snuffed out by how he/she is dressed & how this can be judged/categorized by others (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

7 Months Ago

hello Margie:) this is all sad a poem and about something close to you and me so I wont expound to m.. read more
barleygirl

7 Months Ago

Thanks for added info -- good to have a better idea of where you are coming from -- but I still get .. read more
Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

7 Months Ago

No you got it spot on dearest
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This is sad and clever, the repeated lines of horror .. Poignant write

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

7 Months Ago

Thanks moon :)
You're very good at setting the mood, I love how unique your writing is.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

7 Months Ago

Thanks Noemi:) I'm a bit of a warped bunny! I have to ask what is the origen of your name? is pronou.. read more
Noemi

7 Months Ago

lmao, It's just a pen name I use. I honestly have no idea on the origins, sorry. I loved the way it .. read more

this is not a happy post at all, is it...not sure I want to delve too deep... N

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

7 Months Ago

sorry Nev it is a sad one
Neville

7 Months Ago

ah' but that dont mean it aint a great poem tho, after all said and done, they can't all be butterfl.. read more
I also hear a hollow drum beat as I read this, a steady beat which actually stumbles over the sixth verse, which is very clever if that was planned, and a chilling coincidence if not! Strong feelings and emotions conjured in this piece. The repetition of the C words in different orders builds a pattern which almost feels like a labyrinth, the pieces just don't fit together. Will they ever? It is unsettling, very clever.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

7 Months Ago

the sixth note is an accent note:0! Accentuating the wretched reference of the subject (nice ear) I .. read more
LauraKate

7 Months Ago

My pleasure Robert, you conveyed the feeling for this very well.
I am so using this style of inverted repeat word-sounds in a reverse flowscape following tongue-twisting one liners...
Absolutely inspiring
Question...
How high does one have to be on Dr. Seuss majix to have an output as cleanly crazy as this...

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

7 Months Ago

I have a neurological disorder so i'm hard wired for chaos:) please do use this idea I got it from t.. read more
Silente-Write

7 Months Ago

Oh... So you CHEAT... Haha... I jest, but seriously... Whatever "disorder" you got... It can not be .. read more
The alliteration and the rhyme make for an interesting rhythm in this one, Robert. It's almost foreboding...as if you are warning of something evil about to happen. Lots to think about between the lines...and the photos you chose to accompany your words helps add to the mood. Lydi**

Posted 7 Months Ago


The words that hit home here Bunny are dread, vile, haunting, dead, pawn, pedophiles. This to me has dark undertones and I feel sure it is about abuse. You have written these lines in a very unique way and yet still get the message across. Well done.

Chris

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

7 Months Ago

I tried to convey the effect of the covering up of the molestation that these folks have endured and.. read more

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Added on June 26, 2019
Last Updated on June 28, 2019
Tags: family, pedophilia, hiding, covering, shame, control, scars, rape, fear, rage, smile, brutality, molestation

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Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)
Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

pittsburgh, PA



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I am the Bunny but the bunny isn't me long live the bunny Hello I’m Robert I own an art gallery and performance space in Pittsburgh called The Zenith It is also an antique store and a veget.. more..

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