Revelelation

A recent editing of an old poem added a spoken word link in the reviewers notes section:) yes even the Bunny writes a love poem or two:)

Revelelation

 

His waking thoughts drift

from Shadowy caress of dreams

An aching throb twists

clouded clutching of crave careens

a curtain crease kiss

Upon his face a thin light beam

Rubbing sleepy mist

his brow to a deep sigh he breathes

In a whispered wish

mouths “I’ll take it from here” in plea

 

Rising from repose

rousing sturdy frame

Creaking bones resound

outstretched bastion arms

Like a wise old bear

 saunters unafraid

 To window his gaze

her figure afar

 Sunrise streaks ablaze

thoughts to his smile charm

longing kind eyes praise

her view in disarm

a tear gives display

sky mirrors a storm

 

to hold her

hand in mine

cradle fold

band entwine

to drink her

grand sublime

scent her soothe

bask her fine

for in this

I

Would

Gladly

die

Author's Note

Robert · Revelelation

Reviews

[Shandra Sun]

Your heart is unveiled in this poem, bunny. And yet mysterious, like you always do. I was reading this jewel pretending I can't decode the language, just to feel the serene cadence of the words, so harmonious like the little waves on a quiet lake. What an abundance in your soul. Thank you for sharing that with us.

[Robert Trakofler]

thank you so much Shandra sun smile, that makes me happy:) that picture is my face reflected on a puddle in front of my house right after a storm thought it would be fitting

[Shandra Sun]

I forgot to mention the picture. I love it. There is so much longing in your eyes. For a dream that caught you off guard.

[JungLee]

Very nice love poem. I enjoyed it. c:

[Robert Trakofler]

Thank you Jung glad you liked

[Jb]

Hi Bunny. I really enjoyed this. To me it seems a bit Byron-esque (She walks in beauty...) and I always liked that kinda stuff. It flows well and and floods the soul of the reader. Thanks for sharing.

[Robert Trakofler]

Thanks JB I’m flattered

[MomzillaNC]

These lines stood out for me:
His waking thoughts drift
from Shadowy caress of dreams
Upon his face a thin light beam
In a whispered wish
longing kind eyes praise
a tear gives display

to hold her
to drink her
for in this
I
Would
Gladly
die

[Robert Trakofler]

Thanks mom:) I’m glad you liked

[MomzillaNC]

YVW 😎

[Ted Kniffen]

Not your usual work, Rob. There is a delicacy to this that speaks of love quite well. Having that hand to hold is indeed sublime...walking through life without it would practically be meaningless. You have produced an ambiance here that speaks to the soul.
Glad you have this in your life.

Good write, friend.

[Robert Trakofler]

Every once in a while I get a romantic spark and I have to try to write it out:) mostly I’m a bit shy about this kinda stuff

[barleygirl]

Miles & miles beyond anything of yours I've read so far. This is an epoch expression of longing that can be felt by everyone strongly, as I read down thru your reviews. The photo is a perfect addition to this poem! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Robert Trakofler]

billows billows billows billows...... thanks Willis:)

[Robert Trakofler]

back to catering.... gulp:)

[Einstein Noodle]

if you keep staring like that you'll go blind Bad One! ;)))) this line:
".. “I’ll take it from here” in plea" is killer says i .. not ever stated in plea .. so difficult for the stalwart to admit even a smallest flicker of vulnerability .. she is already risen for almost an hour before i can see anything more than her effects ...there are mountains between us ;))))))) love the pic... guessed it is you ..a very different side of you sir! enjoyed reading very much ... second time around even more worth the effort

[Robert Trakofler]

Thank you Einstein your praise of this one is most humbling good sir:)

[Robert Trakofler]

oops I forgot yes that is me it is a picture i took when I was sitting outside after a rain storm it the reflection of me off of a puddle of water in the road in front of my steps:) thought this picture was apropos.

[Einstein Noodle]

wow...not easy to catch such a clear image in a puddle .. ;)

[Christine Anne Shaw]

There is such a longing and yearning in your words here Bunny. You have really opened up your heart and revealed your emotions. Your final stanza is most beautiful, and those last few words so very touching. A very lovely write my friend.

Chris

[Robert Trakofler]

Thanks Chris, i'm not very good at passion this sort of exercise really pushes my envelope of expression

[Christine Anne Shaw]

There is much longing and yearning here. There is plenty of passion in that. Have a lovely day.
read moreThere is much longing and yearning here. There is plenty of passion in that. Have a lovely day.

Chris

[Neville]

hey take a good hard look at ya'self and then accept that what everyone else may have thought, was nowt but a maybe... even those that came right out with it and told ya so and so...might have been influenced by some barmy f***a...

what matters at the end of the day is that all ya contributions have been totaled up and are added to the great and final outcome.... I'm gonna give ya 100/100 for effort... ya just gonna have to try harder to like or love ya self ......

[Robert Trakofler]

I thought I could read people whew like I have told you before I’ll say it again it’s not hard to love you nev!!!! Damn I bow to your intellect and vision... just floored

[Neville]

...........I'm gonna keep shtum .... N :)

[R.E. Ray]

I read a raging internal storm that calms with reflection and time, and a peace only maturity and love bring. When we’re willing to sacrifice everything for one touch, we know that’s love and more. A moving work, sir.

[Robert Trakofler]

good god i don't think i could of put it better than you just did!